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Old 05-28-04, 11:14 PM   #1
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Fuck yeah, Bring tha heat !!!!! Show em what a true villian is!!!!!
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Old 05-28-04, 04:28 AM   #3
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this was a good...solid collabo..my only complaint is that the styles were all so similar, nice, but similar

good vocab...a tad stretched at times (lol @ pugnacious)

decent imagery


hot drop

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Old 05-28-04, 05:51 AM   #4
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HOOK
Although this part was pretty basic wordplay it stayed on topic, it wasn't going off like some ppl do when they spit a verse, the flow to it was good to the only criticism is drop the ... cuz even tho u only did 3 dots ppl still mite consider it as filler.

BLACK THIEF'S VERSE
playa, ure flow was on all the way through, it was strong to begin with and to finish it, it only became slightly oof with this line.........
We slaughter yall mercilessly, then leavin' the scene mistake free//
this line was too stretched to fit in with the rest. ure wordplay was hott and it just surprises me how poor you came in our battle when u can drop like that. there was a couple of basic lines but mainly u mixed up some hott vocabs.

ECKO'S VERSE
nice shit playa, u had a better flow goin on than black cuz ure structure was nice, everything kept together. ure lines were hott although i felt u fell off coming to the end of ure verse. it was still hott it's just u started even hotter. u showed some gud vocabs in there but that sort of fell short coming to the end, still a hott verse!!

M-SECTION'S VERSE
nice flow, gud structure!! one thing, this aint disrespect cuz it was a nice verse but so far it has been the weakest of them. most likely becuase it doesnt seem as if u have put any thought into it. ure wordplay is pretty basic, nuthin really stood out and it was a shorter verse than the others which has cahnged the whole structure for the entire collab.

CHALK'S VERSE
this was a tight verse, u had a nice flow and ure structure was good apart from one stretched line. u had some nice lines with some gud wordplay but it was basic in places. u opened ure verse pretty gud but u finished it pretty weak cuz the rhymin sort of fucked up. like m-section, it wasn't as if u put thought into it and u dropped a shorter verse.

OVERALL
A tight collab, i liked it, everyone stayed on topic, the hook was good it didn't drop off topic. u all spit gud with some gud wordplay, some better than others. i think black thief had the tightest verse. one thing, i think m-section and chalk shud have spit a 13 line verse like ecko and black thief to keep the whole thing the same and straight. y'all shud do another one playaz!!!

OVERALL 9/10
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Old 05-28-04, 07:08 AM   #5
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Old 05-28-04, 07:17 AM   #6
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ok frist off man this was a hot piece more gangsta type shit man but i like it it is a good key style many metas makes this a great piece man i like that keep doin this shit men
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Old 05-28-04, 08:44 AM   #7
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Yo I appreciate all the feedback...lovin how there isnt any hate....C.S. is burstin wit talent...and we just tryin let yall know...anyways...Countree.... we def need to do a collab....hit me up
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Old 05-28-04, 09:27 AM   #8
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i was likin it that shyt was hott yo can u hit dis up wit a fair vote and i will return the favor

http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=125521
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Old 05-28-04, 01:14 PM   #9
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Old 05-28-04, 04:39 PM   #10
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Old 05-28-04, 06:41 PM   #11
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Old 05-29-04, 01:38 AM   #12
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Old 05-29-04, 11:34 AM   #14
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dope rhymes man. nice usage of words
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