Muthafucka dont test me cuz i dont wanna have ta get messy/
i hope u wore a vest b., cuz i snipe like wesley/
Kinda creative not too bad a punch, decent wordplay but Ive seen this concept b4
dont think i wont do it cuz tha way-i-smile/
cuz i'ma take alotta shots A.I.-style/
lol- this was a clever punch- but your line length has been inconsistent thus far
the only thing certain is death/
and by battlin Renegade ur flirtin-wit-death/
its multi, but the second syllable is the same word... not good for someone judgin ur vocab, flowed decently enough.
this muthafucka wants to be a minista/
u'll be talkin ta god afta i finish-ya/
lol, basic but effective- decent personal.
I'm a fuckin diminisha, and a menace-ta... society/
ur scared ta fight-wit-me, stessin n full of anxiety/
Good Flow, but its mostly filler, no real punchline here.
u can try runnin but i got dead aim when im gunnin/
im likley, ta knock tha swooshes off ur nikes/
knockin swooshes off nikes is a used concept but its an effective punch
cmon dawg ur only a 13-year-old/
go home and get back ta jerkin-ya-pole! - this doesn't rhyme 100% here kinda a forced multi, and the punch wasn't very hard.. I think you fell off a little through the verse here, but no hate at all it was decent- some good punchlines, wordplay and aside from the way it appears on paper it has the potential to flow decently.



Talk about messy Imma merk ya Jason style real discreat//
Ha/How can u be messy when u wear a bib when you eat//
LoL- this is kinda a funny punchline, not great but good- o.k opener.
Sweet 16 thats Renegade real age/He got butta flys like he centa stage//
But if he wants to turn pages in ages I suggest that he rent-a gage//
I dont think this punchline worked here- the multi was decent but nothin special.
I think he's been drinkin booz he dos'nt know he' gonna lose//
Here's some newz If u were BIg foot u coul'nt fill my shoez//
the Big-Foot this o.k, but filler before... good flow though.
Ay Yo verse is like sex fo u/In da begining he dose so good his dick gets fatter//
then he splatters/ he fucks up and in the end The shit really dose'nt matter//
This was weak, it stretched again and the punch is basic and dont flow great.
Listen Rene /My rhymes somthing really rare like uranium//
He has 2pac but watch him get 2poped right to his cranium//(look at his avatar)
This is the best line Ive seen from you... very creative with the wordplay its a personal diss and the punchline sticks and stays... Good line.
Hey Rene your too late/If I could rate yo wackness I'll seal yo fate wit a fuckin 8//
he's a renegade/but da only thing he did rebellous was sayin he's not gonna be straight
This dont flow great, I see where you were tryin to go with the punch, attempted some play off his name- I just think you coulda worded it better..... I think all in all Renegade had better stuff in the begining than Sinista had toward the end.. His punches were stronger and I just felt it more... No Hate, Good Luck in the future both of you... Please return the favor... Vote- Renegade
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renegade fuckin won that other faggot was fuckin weak, come battle me u fuckin bitch

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