Uppin for 2 more votes......

Yo you have a crew that no ones heard of // (Shady Life)
Fuck this homo thug, like DMX im showin NO LOVE //
Bitch sayin he can merk me, you cudn’t merk barney if he was an emcee //
you’re the definition of WACKNESS, quit now and give me win three //
Bitch needs to pre-write, fuck it ill give him the whole night //
He cudn’t write anything hot compared to the rhymes I ignite //
Yo like Staind you’re an outsider lookin in //
Up on AIM askin yo dickriders to take it on the chin //
Too bad those bitches are getting ready to blow me //
You couln’t win even if I gave you 4 votes homie //

^^ this verse was nothing more than garbage lol^^
structure is bad, rhyming is a lil off so work on dat
flow was missing! so work on all that^^^^

Yo imma leave you tongue tied like two lesbians kissing //
Yo your rhymes aren’t seen, like yo body.. there missing //
Go back to pre-school cause your lyrics are elementary //
You lack skill especially when your punches are complementary //
Congratulations you think you won this battle but it’s your imagination//
You cant step to my determination, that’s like stepping to annihilation //
Yo you stink, you need help rappin so heres a link //
This cats a thug… yea right that’s why he listens to n’sync //
Yo being a fuckin fake ass thug is not rewardin’ //
The only shells u bust is when ya scamble eggs in the mornin’ //

^^ right here you stepped it up and made ur verse strong
this is what won you the battle

step up ur flow and structure alright
----------------overall *7*-------------------

yo this bitch is nothing compare to me, your a waste of space you should agree/
give me the key switch you off like an ignition, and leave you dead wid no controvose/
see i can rhyme fool, it's like a power tool, jacking up your ass makin u mental/
my rhyming skills got you climbing hills, smash your teeth in leavin wid flase teeth/
sqwash your brains on da floor, reverse hand break turn in my car, leavin to get eat/
this guy can't think up lyrics if dey were reflecting in the mirror, i feed to u like dinner/
you wasn't ment to be, leave the lyrics on ya sette, my lyrics are twistin doin spinners/
those punches were lackin, and i think dey were PRE WRITTEN, just bin bitten/
dis noob, lost his mind and, now im leavin ur ass blind, no simpathy for a titt-head/
the games practically over, this bitch drives a fuckin NOVA, vehical car, like a retard/
what a spasticated underestemated the most hated mc in dis world so far/
givein no mercy for faggy mcs, thats why i like to tease explict for bein such a clit/
i rap you out like takin you outta da frame, like a fuckin train, takin the tip of the tit/
away you rap on jokes, but der bein out spoken, thats why i backfire leavin u chokin/
never experienced violence, i'll leave you distressed and overdose u when ur doping/
it's like talking to a deaf person, sign language wouldn't even give you an effect/
see i even draw a picture, and you still give me a lecture, ur mind can't even detect/
talkin about my imganiation, you couldn't measure a fraction, and ur an't an attraction/
in looks you idiot, even though your a midget heh, ur penis is smaller den a digit/
another things he's scared of kissing, gets da piss taken cuz he's a fridgid/
to scared to bone a girl, if you did you couldn't even find the hole/
dis dumbass is so dumb if i told him to meet wid a girl he'd go to the north pole/
next time i'll see you, prepare your gonna get your head flushed down a lou/
wid ya mummas biggest shit, that you've ever sin in your life, n gona make dat true/
^^ wow! this verse is way off you need to work on flow and structure
punches and personals dont makje up words and work on that horrid structre
so you obviously seee what u need to work on not bad for ya first battle
if this isnt ur first battle
please leave immediatly...
overall *6*------------
my vote goes to c-explicit
for all around better and hard hitting punches

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