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07-16-04, 02:53 PM
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thanks.....I appreciate all the feedback ya'll posted much love.....
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07-18-04, 11:46 AM
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this is a good piece, you did have a lot of emotion, and it told a story as well, the words were like images, nice shit man, good job.. and keep it up
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07-19-04, 04:50 PM
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thanks for the positive feedback much appreciation...................................
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07-19-04, 09:16 PM
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Banned: Biting
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ya most def homz,ya painted a picture with ya words,i also liked how ya dint use a crappy vocab,tight ,mad props keep writin from the heart....im reppin canada,nice ta see ya mention that...........
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07-20-04, 12:42 AM
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Hah, I guess it's because I'm white and I live in a predominately white area that I don't really feel it. I thought it could've been a lot better. The rhymes and lines seemed kinda childish.
"Mr. Mandela, Ms. Parks both overcame the hate in they lives~ pain, anger and other things pile up in my brain's archives~" I saw what you were going for here, but it still seemed like a sacrificial rhyme. Write some more, elevate some, and I think you'll be good.
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07-20-04, 12:57 AM
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sorry if I offended you I was basing it off the past but I wasn't
trying to hate or anything ya know>>?
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07-20-04, 01:17 AM
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Nah, you didn't offend me. It takes a lot to offend me. :P
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07-21-04, 01:44 PM
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uppin for my work to be seen.............................................. ..........
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07-21-04, 04:31 PM
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Wow Mayn...
Thats One That Touches The Heart... Great Concept, Content... Sounded ALITTLE To Much Like A Rhym... Thats My Only Critisism... But Thats A Strech, Cuz It Really Was Just About Perfect... Real Nice Drop, 9/10 (Just Cuz I Dont Give 10's)... ~One~ |
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07-23-04, 02:51 PM
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fuckin' smile sleepers^^^^^I could become poet of july
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07-24-04, 10:27 PM
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uppin sleepers!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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07-25-04, 02:40 AM
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I thought I responded to this a while ago-- either way, this was a decent drop you used pretty good imagery here.
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07-26-04, 07:27 PM
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Umm...Yeah
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uppin 4 feedback.......................................... ...................
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07-29-04, 03:26 AM
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one i aint know you was a bitch.......well i knew you was a bitch but not a female
 your poem is ok for a sucka .the only black kid in a all white school?!!!they aint suppose to be disrespecting you they suppose to be scared to death of you.damn you softer then i thought |
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07-29-04, 12:11 PM
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^what are you a herb??????????????????????????^ the concept was about a african teenage girl in a all-white community fuck outta here if you don't understand shit kid. F.Y.I.: I'm not a girl dumbass.
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