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Da Vinci 5 100.00%
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Old 07-16-04, 03:14 PM   #1
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Alright, UP'n this shit to the top, votes will be returned just drop a link .
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Old 07-16-04, 09:21 PM   #2
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Up'n This Shit, Don't Sleep On This, Yall, Vote Will Be Returned
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Old 07-16-04, 11:25 PM   #3
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hey ya'll vote fo da vinci.ya'll betta ratern the mutha fuckin fava.
 
Old 07-16-04, 11:59 PM   #4
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SpitaFlame

Da Vinci goin down in history as the Artist of Whack,
You tryin to stab me with a paintbrush is ya Smartest Attack//
->>so-so opener 4/10

Ya raps to horrible is the same as Steer to Caddle,
Me deciding to go hard or not is the only Real Battle//
->>i had to go back over that first line like 3 times ok punch 5/10

I prefer sculpting Rearrange ya Face wit Guns//
Your covered in red paint a new Change has Begun//
->>kinda played out 4/10

You'd look alot betta with Holes in ya Head,
Learn bout you in school also in this battle we Know that ya Dead//
->>didnt connect at all 3/10

Chemical inbalance in ya mind got you Thinkin you Tight,
Me im raw talent cant belive ya eyes got you Blinking Despite....//
->>second line stretched as hail 4/10

That ya seen me before, im white but at skillz i Dispose Race//
Spitin at you with partial cotton mouth you scared you the new GhostFace//
->>wack 3/10

->>23/60

Da Vinci

First off RB let ya in, cause they needed a government subsidy
So less ya want another L, best send in a “sub” to finish this battle b,
->>weak rhyming its an ok punch 4/10

Cause I drop flows so cold, I gotta boil mah ink before I write
Rap’n ya got no future even ya fortune cookies, say “syke”
->>i like the first line and the second one is ok 6/10

See Strobe needs 3 members a day, YOU WERE TO FILL QUOTA
You gotta a better chance to win shit, if ya look under caps of soda.
->>funny 6/10

I’m just battle’n this herb cause it’s part of a balanced diet,
My verse leaves you fucked up, like gay white kid in L.A riot
->>funny shit about the herbs second line doesnt flow right 4/10

Ya couldn’t beat me in this battle if I wrote it with white-out
You just fucked in this battle, like it’s dike’s night out.
->>funny shit 7/10

->>27/50

Da Vinci took it...it was a pretty good fight you put up spitaflame but you just need to elevate some.

->>v-Da Vinci

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Old 07-17-04, 10:50 AM   #5
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Up'n
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Old 07-17-04, 11:34 AM   #6
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i think this was a good battle but i also think dv got it because he had some good puches go vote on my battle and then ill poll you up dv
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Old 07-17-04, 11:40 AM   #7
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alrite, spitaflame, decent opener, wasnt anythin amazin by any means.. second bar was good, prolly ya best. 3rd bar was boring, pretty weak punchline.. 4th bar was sloppy, too many syllables in the second line, 5th bar was pretty good, but once again, wheres the punchline... 6th bar was basically just self glorification, no amazing punchline..

if i can offer you some tips to elevate, you should try and use less filler in your verses, try and make a few words rhyme every line as opposed to only having the last word in the line rhyme, that will vastly improve flow and give you more content in your bars. and also, you need to improve on punchlines, look at his profile, some of his old posts and find weaknesses, then crack really good jokes to ruin his ego.. but anyway..

da vinci, first bar, the punch was a bit stretched out, decent punch, but nuthin special, 2nd bar was pretty good, the fortune cookies bit was good, 3rd bar was good, got the punch pretty easy.. 4th bar worked ok, closer, you said battle too many times, and it finished pretty weak..

overall, da vinci took this, spitaflame, u need to elevate a fair bit bro, even tho there was a lot of filler in da vinci's verse i didnt notice it as much because it was worded a bit better. so vote goes to da vinci..

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