chkd it.......ur struc looks ok,ur flows ok but drop a battle link or spit a diss...
diss me on woteva...jus drop sumthin hard...or a topical piece if u prefer.
holla back.

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uppin.........

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wat up dml aint seen u in a while... good luck wit ur crew but if it dont work out holla at lowryderz inc...

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The Council

the new testamin ft. anxiety (must see)

Bubba Bible Ft. Ajax[/SIZE]

yo you think i can join im good and im elevating all the time i got 1 battles out n im winning dat...

verse.

im influential, ive got fundamentles of this rap game,
my names unique im influencing you just by the name,
katastrophe koncepts or in other words k.k or k,
thats the ku klux klan, chop you up, blood sprayed,
no lines played, punches wide ranged now i say,
let me be in your crew i wont let you down,
ill be the best mc ever i can wear the crown,

ok what you think? holla back

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Positive Feedback
-Good Structure
-Alright Word Play
- Nice Use Of Multies
- Straight Vocabulary

Positive Critisism
-Flow Was A Bit Shaggy
-Could Have Came With More Effort
-Evaluate And Bring Something To The Plate Next Time

I Say "No" To Being In The Crew:

Your Verse Didn't Do For Me.. It Was Weak.. Some Of Your Lines Were Played Out... Or Didn't Fit Where They Were Located..

Check Back!
-Good Luck!!!

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Im a Desire i make u wanna hire me put me in da crew
Im gon show u some hot punchlines so u can tel influence is new
imma make u see it and sleep read it and weep got somthn 2 say'
My punches hit hard son not weak cuz ur reacton to it is u juzz gon Lay
sHit lemmie stop theese stretched ass lines now
U gon make this wow wit that son How
When i heard better punchlines from a mudda fukin Cow

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Im not bad shit....n y ya missin me bastids
Leave nigga's in da past like history-classes

-First Off I Think You Over-Done-Screw-Yourself! (lol)
^Nothing Personal!

-Second Off I Can't Read Half Of The Shit You Done Typed Out Because Of All The 'Spelling Errors' Perhaps? (Work On That)

-You Have Some What Of Word Play.. But Not Much!! (Work On That)

-My Punches Hit Hard Not Weak - Stick To The Facts.. Don't Lay Nothing Out there That Isnt 'True' lol Not When You Are Trying Out Anyways! (Work On That)

-And Your Ending Was Just Plain (Whack) .. But That Would Be Even An Understatement!!! .. Beyond Whack!!!!

I Say 'No' To Being In The Crew ...

PayCe!

-And Good Luck!

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that wa all weak and shit
lol

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Im not bad shit....n y ya missin me bastids
Leave nigga's in da past like history-classes

erm spit a diss.or give a link....................

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^^^^^^^agree wit dml........
elevate....

uppin sum gud fem/emcees..........


WHERE U AT LADYFIYA?......CAN U B DOWN???/
get at me...
peace

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yo DML,

Manip said to post some shyt up in here for you to see... she wants me in but she wanna put it through you also....

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=142475

Dope Verse' ..

-Structure Was Way Off Though (Work On That) ...
-Stretched Lines (Aint Into That) .. - Work On That....

But Everything Else Was Straight..!!!!!!

I Like Your Style... Everything Except Your Structure & Stretched Lines..

But Fa Sho Will Give You 'Slack' ...!!!

(IN) ..

-Enough Said-

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I got more if ya need it.. just holla at the kid or you can just click on my name and check all my posts....

here's a joint I just dropped in poetic scriptures:

http://community.rapverse.com/showp...402&postcount=1

yo hit me up with this now what you think i used better vocabulary i posted it in cypher so imma post it here now...

as i sit here with a pen in my hand staring at the paper,
writing rhymes like your the bitch im the lyrical raper,
i'm the caped "crusader", mr lyrical "invader",
vote "degrader" due to childish "behaviour"
you can call me a "hater" a protest "debator"
or even a facial "masterbater"
cos quite frankley i could give two fucks,
now watch me pull out my 9 and make you cluck.

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