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paramik 1 16.67%
Empire 5 83.33%
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Old 09-15-04, 11:01 PM   #1
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k man u got this by your punches 10/10 but your rhyme was aight its a 8/10 and paranic your flow was wack but empire u flowed tight 9/10 so overall i vote for........

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Old 09-16-04, 04:59 PM   #2
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nice battle..
my explanation no hate either str8 truth..
EMPIRE's verse.
Ya record is unimpressive i went to checked not a single vet
On R.V you hardly a 'STAR' like the 'BEATLES'when Ringo left(1)
^u don't start off tellin' ur challenger that u checked his stats.. no punch existed whatsoever.. second half not bad.. 6/10

No hope you couldnt be dope if you was a addict drug user
I can tell you whack ass from 'FL' yous a fraudalent loser(2)
^lines played for real.. not bad second line have but being sarcastic doesn't help.. 4/10

Bunch of gay guys repping A.I dont understand how you brag
Get ya dicks rubbed in homo strip clubs damn yall some fags(3)
^terrible nonsense, last line was horrible, u could have done better (i think!).. anywayz- 0/10

Dont write great you lightweight fact is that you ameatuer champ
Heavyweight elevation levatate you shouldve been warned in advance(4)
^multi first half not bad if it made better sense, JESUS! second half even worse, what happened empire? 0/10

ur score- 10/40.. u had sum really played lines which didn't help your structure is terrible quit double spacin' ya verse it's newbish.. 25%.. you had one personal throughout the whole verse.. I have seen you drop harder before, I don't know what happened this time.. you fell short, and ya vocab wasn't bad but u put it in the wrong places.. you need to work on a couple of things and the explanations didn't help ur verse out in anyway whatsoever but oh well, good luck, NEXT..

paramik..
Empire wants to impress me, claiming he elevated and improved…
But like uncertain science theories, his claiming is fully unproved.
^first half terrible way to start off, but second half recovered it, kinda funny too.. 6/10

Claims he smokes Mcs?, the only smoke you make, is from a cigar.
Fuck the force you provide, cause ya line drive is just a toy racecar.
^first half again not a real punch.. second fell off a bit also.. 4/10

So back off, you been text-injured so much that you feel the pain.
But mostly by your own punches and your malfunctioning brain.
^nice personal, followin' a "punch line", and funny.. lol 7/10

This shit’s always clinging to a loss, I'd say Empire’s just like moss.
I mean his style and personals are fake, like the T-shirts at Ross.
^best bar in the battle.. it woulda made a great opener, but nice.. lmao 9/10

Can’t get through this battle, the win’s blocked from him like a clot…
Ya hope to win, and the wins ya got, come empty like ya sig spot.
^first half, fell off somewhat.. second half not true about his wins but the emptiness and sig spot came correct.. not the best closer but enuff to take the battle i think.. 6/10
ur score- 32/40 which is 80%..

you need to look out for wordiness, you verse had a nice flow in general but watch your word placement it can throw it off terribly.. but this time it didn't.. you had more personals, better bars.. even punches to follow your verse.. you came harder and your structure wasn't bad either.. good job..

However, both of you need to work on the things i pointed out within y'all verses.. good luck with this battle you too..

my vote/ paramik- brought the harder verse, took the win.. good luck you two..
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Old 09-16-04, 06:05 PM   #3
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aight im not going to break each line down but heres the deal:
empire,lmao,nice opener ringo star line killed it,shit was fire man,the rest of your verse was fairly good but ya flow n structure was on key for the most part,your explanations were not needed at all,opener was the best line out've both verses..
paramik??>.......weak ass verse from you i was again expecting more from you,your punches were lame n did'nt connect you had nice flow,the moss line was straight dumb,
srry paramik but nothin stood out in your verse,maybe your closer but it was'nt enough..
empire got this cause of harder punches...no hate..jus be'in honest...return the favour honestly....
http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=149670
http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=149668
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Old 09-16-04, 07:38 PM   #4
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Paramik took this one, but it was close.

Empire, you had some decent punches, i liked the ringo one,

But PAramik came harder, and the best line of the battle was his malfunctionin brain line.

MY vote, you know

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Old 09-16-04, 08:12 PM   #5
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ha empire your verse was funny as hell

his lines had some good wordplay and flow

vocab was nice also
strcu was easy to read

Paramik:
opener was wack
you only changed to letters to rhyme
flow was ok, but wordplay was bad

empire takes it easy

no hate
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=149782

return the favor on this battle pleaase

don't HATE vote
if ur planning to do it jus don't vote at all

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Old 09-17-04, 07:11 PM   #6
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i'm not gon vote cause empire will only bitch n complain to get dq'ed so i'm just gonna post feedback..

paramik got this, all round more complex verse..
better punches, more complex vocab n connected the bars alot better......

empire? why are you dissin FL emcees when u just got murderd by one?
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Old 09-17-04, 07:22 PM   #7
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fuck that you shud've voted...
upping this shit
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Old 09-17-04, 07:25 PM   #8
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i just wanted to peep the battle, n check the votes...

paramik, i swear he gotta be dick ridin man...

his verse was trash, it wasnt even acceptable as a damn newbie verse...

his first bar was his best feature, an it got worse n worse as he progressed...

i really am failin to see how your losing this battle

i shouldda voted, my bad man
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Old 09-17-04, 08:01 PM   #9
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stop posting in my thread before i have you banned bitch and i had a better verse good shit though paramik shotta go dickride somewhere else homo and you post here again ill have strobe ban you uppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppp pppppin
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Old 09-17-04, 09:15 PM   #10
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paramik got this one... it was close but i still dont like how empire explains his punches makes it unfair.. but paramik did too... better punches and wordplay close battle but paramik got it..

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Old 09-17-04, 09:23 PM   #11
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^we got beef aso you go vote aganist me obvious not explained definate dr fuck you faggot you are now blacklisted
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Old 09-17-04, 10:42 PM   #12
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Paramik for the fact that his flow was definately on point, better than Empiers. He had some damn good punches. Empire always comes with personals something I respect about him. He just got out classed by a textcee with great overall skill.

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Old 09-18-04, 01:32 AM   #13
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Empire wants to impress me, claiming he elevated and improved…
But like uncertain science theories, his claiming is fully unproved.6/10
Claims he smokes Mcs?, the only smoke you make, is from a cigar.
Fuck the force you provide, cause ya line drive is just a toy racecar.4/10
So back off, you been text-injured so much that you feel the pain.
But mostly by your own punches and your malfunctioning brain.2/10 simple
This shit’s always clinging to a loss, I'd say Empire’s just like moss.
I mean his style and personals are fake, like the T-shirts at Ross.5/10
Can’t get through this battle, the win’s blocked from him like a clot…
Ya hope to win, and the wins ya got, come empty like ya sig spot.3/10

Ross is a clothing store…
He doesnt have a sig…





Ya record is unimpressive i went to checked not a single vet
On R.V you hardly a 'STAR' like the 'BEATLES'when Ringo left(1) 7/10

No hope you couldnt be dope if you was a addict drug user
I can tell you whack ass from 'FL' yous a fraudalent loser(2)6/10

Bunch of gay guys repping A.I dont understand how you brag
Get ya dicks rubbed in homo strip clubs damn yall some fags(3)
4/10
Dont write great you lightweight fact is that you ameatuer champ
Heavyweight elevation levatate you shouldve been warned in advance(4)8/10 good line


y em[ire takes this wit good punches and wordplay

v/empire

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Old 09-18-04, 05:52 PM   #14
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Voted For: Empire

break down

Vocab - Para
Punchez - Empire
Personalz - Empire (not realli any tho)

don't feel like xplainin any further cuz he got 2 outta 3 so he got my vote

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Old 09-19-04, 06:15 PM   #15
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Paramik
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Empire wants to impress me, claiming he elevated and improved…
But like uncertain science theories, his claiming is fully unproved.
...good opener...nice punch 8/10

Claims he smokes Mcs?, the only smoke you make, is from a cigar.
Fuck the force you provide, cause ya line drive is just a toy racecar.
...kinda weak...6/10

So back off, you been text-injured so much that you feel the pain.
But mostly by your own punches and your malfunctioning brain.
....haha not to shabby, nice punch 7.5/10

This shit’s always clinging to a loss, I'd say Empire’s just like moss.
I mean his style and personals are fake, like the T-shirts at Ross.
...don't understand why a t-shirt would be fake..?good first line...5.5/10

Can’t get through this battle, the win’s blocked from him like a clot…
Ya hope to win, and the wins ya got, come empty like ya sig spot.
...not bad of a closer, coulda been a bit better...7/10
overal: 34/50

Empire
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Ya record is unimpressive i went to checked not a single vet
On R.V you hardly a 'STAR' like the 'BEATLES'when Ringo left
...hahaha solid opener and punch 9/10

No hope you couldnt be dope if you was a addict drug user
I can tell you whack ass from 'FL' yous a fraudalent loser
....nice personal and punch 8/10

Bunch of gay guys repping A.I dont understand how you brag
Get ya dicks rubbed in homo strip clubs damn yall some fags
....meh 6.5/10

Dont write great you lightweight fact is that you ameatuer champ
Heavyweight elevation levatate you shouldve been warned in advance
...pretty good closer...7.5/10
overal:31/40

v/empire...close battle, empire takes it though
 
 


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