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Old 10-11-04, 06:25 PM   #16
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Cool drop...structure was a bit different from wut ive seen but it was decent...the multis and flow was nice....hook was nice....imagery and overall piece was nice too...this was a lil over decent drop....felt it tho...give it a 8.4/10
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Old 10-11-04, 06:26 PM   #17
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Old 10-11-04, 06:58 PM   #18
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Yesh this was dope VP

Nice structre, use of multi's and flow.....

This peice would be dope in audio......

ANyways this shit was worth the read....

8-10

Peace and peep any of my poetry or open mics if you want.....
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Old 10-11-04, 06:59 PM   #19
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thnx Ice Pick... uppin'.
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Old 10-12-04, 01:19 PM   #20
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Old 10-13-04, 05:41 PM   #21
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Breathe... 1 and to the 2, 2 and to the 3, lol

aiight, this was a pretty dope drop, man. I liked the wordlpay and shit. Real deep shit. I thought it was some version of the Fab song. But it wasn't. Nice shit, man. props. Structure was fucked however. but overall, dope shit. pc
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Old 10-13-04, 06:01 PM   #22
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this is a dope drop man, i was feelin the chorus and the flow of it is great, nice vocabulary and multies in this as well, overall good piece...1
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Old 10-14-04, 02:10 PM   #23
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Old 10-19-04, 01:55 PM   #24
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Old 10-20-04, 01:46 PM   #25
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God damn motha fuckaz... uppin' for FEEDBACK
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Old 10-21-04, 06:23 PM   #26
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Wat?? this is all?????????????????
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Old 10-21-04, 06:24 PM   #27
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its dope.... i want to see more...
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Old 10-21-04, 06:30 PM   #28
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Lovin all them multi's and world play
Thought it could use some better flow or structure

But in the end, it's good
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Old 10-21-04, 07:18 PM   #29
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Thanks for the feeback y'all... appreciate it greatly.
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Old 10-21-04, 08:44 PM   #30
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Noice drop, that was some dope shit keep writing I thought there were a couple things you could work on. But overall I thought the structure was pretty good & it was laced with some sweet rhymes
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