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10-18-04, 08:35 AM
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decent stuff here, i've seen better from you but not bad
everything was intact for the most part..you had some vocab working and the flow was on point except for a stretched line or two, but i think you could benefit from digging a little deeper content wise..not to take anything away from yer work or anything like that. i just would have liked to have seen you tap into that real creativity to really grab the reader's attention..regardless props man n keep at it
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10-17-04, 02:42 AM
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Banned: Cheating
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weerd...uppin.....
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10-17-04, 04:20 AM
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Banned: Cheating
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uppin......this......
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10-17-04, 08:03 AM
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Banned: Cheating
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uppin this shit once again.......
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10-17-04, 09:15 AM
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kids parish in peices cause they lacked self intelligence...
lyrics today disgustin like eatin feices check tha verse tha punches are irelevent dat wuz hot dat line wuz a killer u r talented i lyked yo stuff u r better den me for show mane how do u set ya rhyme so it all centerd lyke dat??????????????????? |
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10-17-04, 09:50 AM
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Banned: Cheating
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weerd...uppin this........
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10-17-04, 09:54 AM
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IP:
hmmm, read well but dv was on point when he
said you focused to much on ya vocab... without multi's it made ya bars seem stretched n we all kno peeps hate stretched shit...! but overall i thought it was nice intro... |
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10-17-04, 09:57 AM
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Banned: Cheating
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IP:
nah it wasnt rele stretched...but am back an their will be mo...
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10-17-04, 10:00 AM
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didn't really get that last bar but it was aiight as a whole... first drop since ya started again?...
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10-17-04, 10:02 AM
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tha last bar is self explanied an it was betta then aight more so then 99% of tha shit people post in here...
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11-06-04, 08:41 AM
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Can't argue with that 99% shyt... i checked ya last bar again... and again, i don't get the last part of that bar... missin' rhymes like c sections? other than that, though, i was feeling it *chew187... a lil werd of advice.... drop dat shyt in ya own thread... shyt's kinda disrespectful with that freepost bullshyt.... leave ya feedback then leave it alone...one Last edited by Ill-Grammatix : 11-06-04 at 08:44 AM. |
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10-17-04, 10:39 AM
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r u going 2 tell me how 2 center yo verse lyke dat????????
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10-18-04, 07:09 AM
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Banned: Cheating
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uppin this shit..............
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10-18-04, 07:25 AM
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nice shit Intro guess who's back....Introspect...hits them bars...that break ur neck...lol anyway uppin this for fam...and hows our collab thread comin along?...ima up that
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10-18-04, 07:26 AM
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Banned: Cheating
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weerd dog thankz you know i had to come back strong...
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