You are a vet... On this site... No one on this site is a vet in rap tho... No one...

Troop you have some good stuff, elevating yeah you could use some, maybe rise above the lines involving disabled people lol (I haven't seen too much of your stuff lately to know if you're past that, so don't hold it against me). I admit I still need quite a bit of elevating too, I just don't really get many replies to my callouts lol. But I'm curious...what did you think of my verse when we battled?

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yea u beat me fair and square....im one 2 man up 2 my losses

My punches are kinda out the box..i dont think like everyone else

yea ima pull out some vocab..i think i was more focused on that 2 much
ima keep my font size the same tho...i like small text

Thanx ya ....uppin 4 more thoughts

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Everyone gets my punches...


Their just whack

i have punches...jus need sum new shit

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aight look troop, I aint the best, but I know my shit, first off, don't do anything about the vocab, it's fine, just try not to focus on it as much, I like the meta's, you great at that shit, but you wanna add a lil more wordplay in there, mix it a bit nah mean? also you gotta throw the met's in with a punch or personel, ya can't just say "This encounter is disastorous like tight rope walkers in casts" ya know, look up some personels on the guy, on his name, and switch up lines so it's like so

Bar 1. Use meta's and throw in a punch
Bar 2. Use wordplay throw in a presonel
Bar 3. Use meta's throw in a personel
Bar 4. Use wordplay throw in a punch

Or you can just be like fuck wordplay, stick wit the meta's only, as long as you mix in harder punches and personels.

I feel u thanxxx....Can i get some more

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audio, i cant call no body good till i hear audio, sorry Troop, thats jus ma opinion

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troop..... your record doesnt reflect your skill...
i peeped some of your battles.... you could be better... there are a lot of people on this site better than you.... but true you are very good.... but you could be better

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CrhymeSindicate

'Till Death

when did records reflect skill?

O dont worry the Voice is comin real soon

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iight, to make yourself better put it like this...


Okay, first off fake personal, second off, this isnt a punch even if it was true it is just saying "Oh socrates is a kid, cuz he goes to bed early", a punch needs to ATTACK your opponent like....

See you're attacking me going to bed early, and at the same time saying i am sleeping with my mom, rather than trying to get voters to do math in there head about time zones and call it complex....

Now, a super dope punch would be....

he's attacking his claim to be number one by saying that "yes you are number one, but not shit" i dunno how to explain tis much more but its ill

Also...


Now thats just fuckin ill, wordplay, flow, metaphors, its got it all

Now something a lil more your style....


Now notice this and your style and quite similar, but the major difference dope ass set ups, wording, and creativity, you cant go off something anyone can think of. Doing so is not creativity, its just whack. So try and get and get everything in your verse.

Im not much of an elevator but I tried dammit. You wont start getting better for a while but just be pateient and keep working

*takes breath*

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Soundclick

dont play these silly games.


you know yourself if your good or not.
seems like you just want other people to notice what your doin.

Kinda like fat people in a mirror. They still want people to say they're skinny.

Damn, someone came back with a very different attitude towards things.

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Soundclick

Soc, how do you find these random ass, dope battles?

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