leavin feedback for fiya girl this was good normally people who aint used to doin topicals have trouble adjusting but you was good here niice vocab imaginary was good an the way you set it up intregued me an kept me entertained in the story overall i think you did very good verse 8/10 overall weerd stay up ma =1=

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Voted For: ~Lady Fiya~

Well this was a very good battle that has been slept on. So Ima contribute what I can right now...

Anxiety:

Aiight lemme go peep...

kk. Well...I think you had a not bad verse. You Stayed on topic which is always good. I liked how you tied in a few multies in there. I didnt really like the ... after every line. Possibly coulda fixed up vocab a bit. Also you could have maybe centered your verse to make it look less bunched up. Also, maybe next time you could use some metas, those are some descriptive helpers when it comes to topicals...I mean they really leave a nice overall effectivness.
Props tho dawg, ima have to give you....

Overall: 68/100

Lady Fiya

Aiight Fiya, im gunna read yours here.
haha, dope...lemme break it down for ya.

Alright well you stayed on topic the entire time and so well. I didnt catch any metas in your verse as I said to Anxiety, but I think other things about yours made up for it. All your lines were almost perfectly aline which is a tough thing to do in topicals. You had a nice clean looking verse, first appearance was attractive...even with a smaller font you verse didnt look all bunched up. Very nice imagry throughout whole verse. Your vocab was pretty good too...its not always about using larger words, I feel your diction was perfect in describing the situation. Gave me a good feel of the setting and characters. One more thing, I dont usually like when topicals are divided into sections...but this style is new to me and I must say was very effective. Fiya, you hounestly did a great job and have got a lot of skillz. Keep it up cause your gettin my vote today.

Overall: 94/100

Well props to both and no hard feeling but someones gotta win and in my personal opinion Lady Fiya took this one. But hey, it aint up to me...let the votes compose a winner.

Center it? Obviously i tried that, hence the [/center] or whatever at the beggining and end of the verse... Lines werent strechted anyways, not to mention it doesnt matter how "bunched up" a verse is... The ... after every line is my style... I mean seriously kid, you are rating my font and shit more than my verse... I don't care that you voted for lady fiya, she had a dope verse... But to give me a 68 and to give her a 94 makes me think you didn't read it my verse, honestly... Emotion, Imagery, and Flow are the three main parts of topicals... And you are rating me on my metas and my ... at the end of my lines... How fucking whack.

Please return the favor with an hounest vote of your own...like I always say, topical heads gotta stick together cause most other ppl wont vote on our verses. (Too much reading)... http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=147152

word.. thanx this battle has been getting slept on.. it must be too hot for rv.. hee hee naw JUST JOKING! i'll return the favor now.. and thanx Virtue for the feedback, i appreaciate that.. upppppin.................!

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Voted For: ~Lady Fiya~

Lady gets this one, I felt her more in this topic she had better strucutre good worplay and she had me feeling as if I was in the topic and as if she was living in the topic herself. But u had a few stretched lines and this is what help lady get this one so over all lady gets my vote.

8/10

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very nice work from both of you.........keep the good job up folkers. one.

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Voted For: ~Lady Fiya~

damn Lady fiya Im Lovin This rii Here

But N e way Back to The matter at Hand

Lady fiya
did very well Came very Flawless LOL I Never seen a structure like that on here since I dont know when but she brought some originality to this battle so thats why she gets my vote

Anxiety
You did good as well but just not good enough its like in some areas youd have my attention then other areas id be bout to go to sleep or watching TV lol But no hate mayne you did good but always remember you dont always need a good hook at the begining you need hooks all thruogh ya piece if you know what i mean ....its to hold the readers attention

Peace


PRETTY PLEASE RETURN THE FAVOR I ONLY HAVE ONE BATTLE SO PLEASE RETURN THE FAVOR

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uppin for some "real" votes... i can't believe this shit is STILL open.. vote up, kiddies.

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ROFL Scarface was talking bout hooks like we did a song battle... OMG close this shit, upppinnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnn

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blahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh uppin this battle ONCE again..

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Voted For: ~Lady Fiya~

I think that Lady Fiya got this battle because i feel that Lady Fiya came stronger in the following categories...Topic i felt Lady Fiya got it was effective and was on point anxiety i was feelin it but Lady Fiya was real creative in her piece Imagery and vividness i felt went to Lady Fiya good lookin wordplay and creativity goes to Lady Fiya and flow and structure i'll give to Lady Fiya.

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The non-conlusion thing LF used was cool coz it was like her piece wasn't really over also the layout was real even flow was real good and topic was on point to the core it was a very good piece very poetic in its own way.

Anxiety...it was another good drop by yourself but to me it was kinda like an underestimation of you opponent coz the drop itself while on topic jus didn't come across the way Fiyas did...may be because of the screw up in trying to centre it...but still words are words...flow and structure good too but it wasn't enough to win this im afraid

Nice battle though both should be pleased with their spits

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