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05-06-05, 02:55 PM
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Can I get some more feed....
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05-06-05, 03:15 PM
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I thought you had dope punchlines....
i really like the one where u called that guy a retard... good flow and structure... Rtf - http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=189490 j.k... overall it was sexy. good use of imagery while at the same time being abit abstract and keeping you thinking... your vocab was good, big words but not too big that it made you look smarter than you are.. structure was alright, added dimension to your flow... nice drop
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05-06-05, 10:38 PM
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Thanks^Uppin for some more.
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05-07-05, 03:33 PM
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.......Uppin........
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05-07-05, 05:11 PM
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Nice imaginary, the emotion needs to be upp a little. The vocab on this piece was nice. Your sentence did create imaginary after line after line. Use meta'z in your verse, to make your imaginary more complex. Overall, nice verse.
Return a fav in my OM.
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05-08-05, 12:30 PM
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Thanks uppin...
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