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05-21-05, 10:14 PM
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IP:
Eh.....this was pretty weak , could have been alot better..
Your structure was off.. could have been better... try to line up youir bars, and next lime use alittle punhclines....Wordplay was decent The main thing you should focus on it your structure .. try to make wel worded verses... nice punchlines couple of meta's and bam good verse 
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05-22-05, 01:32 AM
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IP:
^^^^^^ agreed....... very very agreed...... ill copy and past so u get the idea
Eh.....this was pretty weak , could have been alot better.. Your structure was off.. could have been better... try to line up youir bars, and next lime use alittle punhclines....Wordplay was decent The main thing you should focus on it your structure .. try to make wel worded verses... nice punchlines couple of meta's and bam good verse |
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05-22-05, 07:58 AM
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**the council**
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IP:
first thing i'll say is work on your structure coz your flow was all over the place......try to make each line near enough the same length......work on your content....try coming with somethin a lil bit more original y'know.......your vocab could be upped....work on your rhyme scheme.....anyway an aight drop.....4/10
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05-22-05, 09:38 AM
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IP:
this was nice street lang which i've heard a million and a half time should've thrown some vocab up in here for real girl, but over all you mades it decent doe so i respect that for real
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