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05-23-05, 01:30 PM

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Voted For: Lay-Text

this was a pretty dope topical from both but i was feelin lay-text's alittle more ,

Lay-Text
Your vocab and wordplay was on point , your structure was good some lines were alittle stretched though,nice emotions and good imagery was felt on your drop.. you really made the reader image what was happening , ... nice drop... nice topic ... and i like the repfrence to Pac...it was really deep..
Overall nice drop keep it up , and it was enough to take the win

Sakim
You had another good drop..just use lacked alittle, your structure was on point ...your wordplay and vocab was also on point , you just to me didnt have as much feelin in your drop..that lay-text had , i was really feelin the wedding reffrence then the marraige crashin...your flow was good i was really liking your drop..i just felt the pac reference alittle more...

overall vote-Lay text

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05-23-05, 09:28 PM

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05-24-05, 05:39 PM

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05-25-05, 01:30 PM

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05-25-05, 01:48 PM

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Voted For: Lay-Text

Vote: Lay-Text

Ive voted really on personal preference, because both drops were really technically flawless in terms of structure - both were tight altho laytext's was a lil more concise...flow, the both flowed well and were easy to read and understand...vocabulary, i think Lay-Texts was slightly better here, he used better vocabularily but didnt over it, and I could actually see it as Pac talking ina way, sakims was gd but i unno - longa lines made it less realistic...in term sof topic coverage both were on point...

what took it was the angles both came from, Sakim after ur first few linez, i knew exactly what u were going 2 do, with Lay-Texts i dint actually realise it was PAc..till half qay through, and i thought it was dope writin as pac, nice idea...

Vote - Laytext

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05-25-05, 11:06 PM

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It's cool. Uppin for some votes...................

05-29-05, 11:25 PM

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checkin polls, good drops..................from both of you.......

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05-29-05, 11:30 PM

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05-31-05, 03:39 PM

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Voted For: Lay-Text

aiighht this was a pretty good battle. I don't really look at topicals, but this was a good read.

Lay-text, you had good metaphors in this. And your vocab, wit some multi's was good to read. Vocab was real good, and you threw in a few multi's. I like how you did the topic, talkin' about fallen hip-hop icons and current ones as well. Real nice. 9/10

Sakim,
You had a read good one too. You had a nice story. Yours flowed pretty good too. You had some nice metaphors as well. Your vocab, however, wasn't as good as LAy-Text. So that kinda cost you some points there. but overall, it was nice. 8.5/10

Overall, both were tight, but it came down to vocab to decide it, and usuage of meta's. And I think LAy-text was a lil better.

v/Lay-Text

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06-01-05, 07:00 PM

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06-02-05, 06:31 AM

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Voted For: Lay-Text

I think that Lay-Text got this battle because i feel that Lay-Text came stronger in the following categories...Topic i felt Lay-Text got it was effective and was on point Sakim Aerias ya verse was also good as well but Lay-Text was more on point so i guess u shoulda been a bit more creative on this occasion rhyming i felt went to Lay-Text good lookin wordplay and creativity goes to Lay-Text and flow and structure i'll give to None as both had nice lay outs and flow.

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06-02-05, 07:04 AM

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06-03-05, 09:59 AM

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06-06-05, 06:58 PM

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