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05-24-05, 03:49 PM
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IP: 7F08 083F
this shit was nice, i liked everything about it...
wordplay was good, vocab was pretty good, the flow was there, it was all good, i look forward to seeing more from ya'll in the future...
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05-24-05, 04:19 PM
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IP: 28AD 5545
That Was Pretty Nice...
OSB, And Big City Had Overall Very Nice Verses... But LFS, You've Gotta Work On It A Bit... You're Structure Is Entirely To Streched... And You Flow Can Get Boring Cuz It Lacks Internal Rhyming... But The Actual Content Of The Verse Was On Point... Overall This Was A Good Piece, But... I Didnt Like The Little Quot Things As Hooks... That Works VERY Nice On Audio But Its Corny On Text... But Good Job Breaking Up The Verses... None Of The Verses Were To Long... All The Emcee's Meshed Pretty Well Except LFS... I'd Give This Piece An Overall: 7.8/10 Good Job Eveyone, Keep It Up... .One. |
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05-24-05, 04:23 PM
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The story goes. Bill, B.
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IP: 606D F99A
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Aww I'm always the one that sucks lol.....
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05-24-05, 04:40 PM
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Peace, Love, Unity
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IP: AB23 98FF
Lol, nah, its just I'm dope
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05-24-05, 05:16 PM
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IP: 0825 899A
Na, Fs You've Got Talent No Question...
But Your Work Isnt As Honed As The Other Emcee's You Were With... You Just Need Work And You Could Be Great... But On This Piece You Were Definately Overshadowed By More Expierienced Writers... Keep Working Though, You'll Get To That Level... Work On Shortening Your Lines And Using Internal Rhyming Especially... Stay Up Kid... .One. |
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05-24-05, 05:47 PM
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The story goes. Bill, B.
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IP: 606D F99A
lol I know...I was jokin lol....it sucks I'm friends wit Red Bull, Kesse, OSB, Big City, Non Capisco...etc. lol...but I'm the worst of the best so it's cool lol
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