Voted For: Pen N' Paper

What the hell is a “soddit” man and u couldn’t be ill even if u were an infection
Even if I showed him the way for perfect… he’ll still be askin for the directions
^^1st line too basic,2nd mediocre
Is this a joke? Without hands around his neck I could still make him choke
Cuz guy is a nervous wreck and when it comes to his text he still gon be broke
^^1st line too basic,2nd. decent
Punches against him are like a homicidal person but ill make u think of suicide
The five lines above are like the 5 rounds in Tysons fight and im Kevin McBride
^^ight

Well you had some decent lines there.But shit was too basic.No werdplay in this shit either.So bassically,ur problem simplicity.

you continued to beef, but now i'm gonna prove youre wacker now.
but i admit you got readers hands up...tryna keep the vomit down!
^^^So why they put hands up for vomit?
what kinda name is that? quit acting and give up tryna be a mc.
coz once i cut this lame, paper wont have a fucking edge on me!*
^^whack....too basic
i'll erase this fool, batter and bruise this faggot ass rook.
so you can "write" your own story, but you'll still be a bitch in my book!**
^^to basic

Really this whole battle was basic.I specifically saw a bunch a fillers in yor verse.It also appeared to be a bit on the stretched side.Pen&Paper edged u on the punches.


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