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R-Rated 5 100.00%
Gongshow. 0 0%
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Old 07-13-05, 12:50 AM   #1
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Uppin This Like Gongshow. Watching Gay Porn

*For Gongshow* That Means Your Penis Elevates When You Watch Gay Porn...So I'm Elevating This Thread Like What Happens To Your Penis When You See Two Guys Fuck.

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Old 07-14-05, 04:52 AM   #2
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Please Vote......................................

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Old 07-14-05, 12:00 PM   #3
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Holy Shit....Fucking Vote You God Damn Cocksucking Bastards.

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Old 07-15-05, 01:07 AM   #4
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Old 07-15-05, 08:00 AM   #5
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that R dude got this shit..........................
 
Old 07-16-05, 10:58 PM   #6
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^ then vote you stupid fuck.
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Old 07-23-05, 04:08 PM   #7
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uhp...............................................
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Old 07-23-05, 04:16 PM   #8
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ok nice topic here....both did good here very hard to decide also so ill break it down a lil
RR- u had a good piece nice emotions,vocab,structure,flow, and basicly everythin except i didnt like ur creativity i think it coulda been better from u.....but still a good piece keep it up and jus work more on creativity jus a lil more aight....
GS-ok u had a good piece good vocab usage and a good structure and like RR u need to work more on that creativity but u also u need to work a lil more in ur emotion and jus a dash more in vocab but ur imagery was very good......
V/ RR urs was more better when i broke it down so....u get tha vote....but both did good jus RR had a better verse cuz GS u were missin ur emotion and vocab there but still good from both and keep them up......but my v/ goes to r-rated.....
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Old 07-30-05, 02:35 AM   #9
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Uppin This...V.O.T.E.!!!

Damn Muphuckas..

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Old 07-30-05, 03:06 AM   #10
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Gong-I was feelin ya verse here kid...nice ..ok imagery
but i wasent feeling that much emotion..
could have used better Vocab..and like i said better emotion
in a topical u need 2 make the voter feel your words from
the jump and i didnt walk away with that from your drop

R-Excellent drop here ..Nice imagery..i was feelin the
emotion...nice structure..and the vocab was top notch
u used everything that a topical need 2 contain and
used it and Executed.....Nice Topical here ya
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Old 07-30-05, 09:47 AM   #11
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Thanks For Honest Votes...


Upping This For More Votes..Only One More Needed To Close This.
 
Old 07-31-05, 11:53 PM   #12
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Flow-Damn....R-rated murder Gongshow in this catergory.SHit...Rated even had alliteration.A rare sight thses days.
"Pratically Particular To Secular Sections of Self Salvation.."
^^DAMN...talk about tongue twisters

Content-Like all topicals..there were points when I was bored.Concept wasn't really inovative by neither.Imajery was better by R.Gong..my advice is to get a little more complex.

Wording-R as usual.The lines just seemed to be made for each other.Nice job here.Gong...wording is not something that can be taught...it's something that gonna come from experience

Multis-R....not many lines(if any) where he rhymed words with one sllyables.

Vocab-R....every like had one word that can be found on a high school exam

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