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Old 08-16-05, 09:38 PM   #16
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Not much to say not already say. I love you like I like sugar, on peanut-butter covered bread. And this verse was like chunky peanut butter, mhm-mhm! - plays banjo. -

You had that...emotional shit, but my heart is like meatloaf left in the stove too long --- good for lobsters. My shovel agrees all aspects had the finality of a breast job costing twenty million g's. A penis wags in delight at this collab, and the imagery and structure involved with it's creation, Jumping Johazafat. I said John had the best piece, but both were equally pleasurable.
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Old 08-17-05, 12:38 AM   #17
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^LOL at fluffy nucca looks dope..
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Old 10-24-05, 02:27 AM   #18
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i liked this..vocabulary could have been uped..you got this to a beat man?
imaginary was dope..concept never bores me
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Old 11-20-05, 12:17 PM   #19
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Great imagery. You also happened to have great concept development, and managed to keep the reader intrigued the whole time, which is great. Vocab was alright but you did manage to have some pretty crappy spelling in there at times. Flow was great but I think you overused or exagerated the "...".

I wrote on a topic similar to this twice, and I think maybe we could collab on one of these type of topics, it would be pretty nice. Check my "Open Windows" link in my sig if you have any doubt, and if you could hit that up with some feedback.
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Old 11-21-05, 02:19 PM   #20
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wuz a good topic n had good flow n structure n all but like homie said vocab too baisc for the subject u were describing overall pretty good keep up da good work...btw when u gonna let a nigga know how 2 put a link on my shit so u can quit closin my drop's in om? holla back i sent u a pm u seem 2 b one of da head niggaz on dis site n all so do ya job peace
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Old 11-21-05, 02:38 PM   #21
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Not totally original, but an ok take on the topic. Imagery was ok, and your emotion was ok. God just saving the world is kinda boring and expected, though the end had a lot of potential if you had made that word "disappear", but ya. Flow and all that was fine. Overall, nothing that new or different.

summed up what i would say
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