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Old 10-22-05, 02:59 AM   #1
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put all the fake bull shit aside hell if you buy rap then you buy me just shut up you'
re welcome to post in mine lets face it cats on this site don't know fuck about Hip hop they write fucking cartoons and ignore the realness
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Old 10-22-05, 08:03 AM   #2
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homie your on the internet you can only get but so real...........
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Old 10-29-05, 08:53 AM   #3
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meh....................ups............
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Old 10-30-05, 02:06 AM   #4
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The rhyming and the overall pace and flow of the piece was the best aspect in my opinion. By just reading it, I felt as if I was spitting inside my mind you know. Very fluent pace in the piece.

But besides that you managed to hold it down vocabulary-wise as well, same goes for your imagery. You use vague, poetic images which I definitely like. Emotion is there too but it's not so much of an emotional piece you know but still you added it to it.

Solid stuff
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Old 10-30-05, 09:31 AM   #5
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liked the way you wrote this, short but it was on point..
kinda wasnt feelin the last line as much as the rest of the verse
overall decent work for 20 minutes.......
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Old 10-30-05, 10:29 AM   #6
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yea............but still............ya kno............i should've added the other verse cuz it was a collab at first
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