It's a shame the whisper on the intro isn't a perfect match to the beat and a blatantl hard loop. The beat's nice but the resolution of it is AAAASSSSSSSS so it sounds flat whne it should sound so much warmer.

First verse: The lyrics and flow are pretty much on and ready. You need a WAY better mic immediately - but I'm sure you already know that. Your voice sounds nasal like everyone else voice in a crap mic. You shoudl have leveld out the hook's volume, and you gotta inject a little more variance in your lines. I'm in the second verse now BTW, jsut kept typing the whole way through. The flow is dead on and the lyrics are actually relevant to themselves and good, but your mastering skills on this are bootee. PS, cut the long stretches of silence off on your vocals since I can hear whne you turn your mic on and adjust it's position before you said a word.

The Marvin Gaye sample - if you put it on there, you should hav eadded some reverb to it to add more aura to it and also to fade ou the cut point so it's not so abrupt but rather gradually fades out.

Oh yeah, I forgot to say, your voice reminds me of about 80% Rakim with a pinch of Enygma, and the enygma part comes from your mic. All in all, pure conent wise, this is a great track. in execution against other real "tracks" it's "good", the quality keeps it form "great" and the variance in the delivery keeps it from "classic". 1

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werd.... definitely tryna up my mastering skills... still playing with a few things trial and error style... i learn best that way.... my mic def needs an upgrade... also working on keeping my breath control...in control... that's another reason for the variances in verses... doing them over and over again takes a lot out of ya by the end of the day... emcees don't realize that exercise still plays a major role in what ya do performance wise....i been slacking...lol.... looking at getting my mic relatively soon... just got some priorities to work out with moving back east and getting my new job b4 i'm completely out of the army... definitely appreciate da feed and the suggestions... this is prolly the realest feedback i've ever seen on a track... it was well explained and actually offered sumn i could use to up my game instead of just "Boost ya vocals" or "get a new mic".... good lookin out...one

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