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12-10-05, 06:25 PM
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Word, niggas is dumb...
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12-10-05, 06:19 PM
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Oh so I really AM dope. I thought you were after my money.
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12-10-05, 06:36 PM
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I never said I didn't like it.
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12-10-05, 08:33 PM
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"Ike ripped it better than you" "That shit sound like some old school 70's shit" "Where Ya Bars At? ROFLFLFMAMFAOMOLAFO" What?
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12-11-05, 10:01 AM
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Ike DID rip it better than you. and now we know why, cos it liked the song. and the beat DOES sound like some 70's shit and I did NOT laugh at it, Jiddy Jid man.
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12-11-05, 01:56 PM
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Nah my shit was legendary...
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12-10-05, 06:51 PM
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^qword, that's my fav pop lotty song too. word. good shit yo. ~_~
and props ike for feed
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12-10-05, 07:08 PM
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Listen to secret wars... its real old, but i need feedback to figure out where to go with my style.
www.soundclick.com/onemb by the way, i know vocals are a bit low.
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12-11-05, 01:38 AM
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first off...the lil intro...where your humming with the beat....lose it...cause if someone hears it...that knows you or whatever...theyll hear that and immediately be biased towards the track cause of how gay the humming is...just talk a lil bit or something to hype the track up...talk about how dope you are or something....anything but the humming... ok..... first off...your decent for just starting to make songs...and you def. have potential.... BUT...instead of making short ass tracks like this when u start....push yourself to make full song...with a hook....cause it can hurt you....if u get good...but still cant write a good hook...just push yourself to make complete songs...and it will help a lot in the long run...dont make half ass 1 verse tracks like this.... your flow is a lil off and u need to work on it...look up a basic ABAB flow...and work off that...practice it....sometimes you cant tell what words your rhyming...and thats not good....research that flow...and start with it...then get more complex with it... delivery isnt bad for starters...but its still not convincing...delivery will of course get better with time...but...start pushing it now... beat was ok....quality was ehh... just take that advice...and run with it...NO MORE 1 VERSE TRACKS...word on hooks...itll help...trust me
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12-11-05, 01:29 AM
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k.......listening... first of all....it sounds like your rushing the shit out of your words...i realize you dont wanna sacrafice lyrics for flow....but there comes a certain point...wheres its just necessary....cause it honestly makes it unenjoyable....when u cant understand what someone is saying...cause theyre trying to fit soo much into 1 bar..... one thing i really like about this track...is how u talk back and forth with the people...it def. keeps it a lot more interesting.... as far as the rushing your words thing...that was really in the beginning more than anywhere else..... lyrically this is dope....and im feelin the beat....quality is ass...but im sure thats nothing u dont already know... your delivery....is ok....BUT...i think it can use A LOT of improvement....like i said with a couple others in here...your saying the words...but im not believing what your saying...your not coming with that delivery....where everything just stands out and u can feel what the dudes saying....its just kinda the same the whole way throughout....switch it up....switch your tone up with what your saying to make people believe it....and try to come with a lil more energy... actually...i can honestly see in this track...as far as the delivery...where your on your way to "making me believe what your saying"....you switch up tone a lil in a couple parts.....and your getting your feet wet with it...but go all out on your next track with it..... but overall...track was pretty original...had nice lyrics...flow like i said..in the beginning i wasnt feeling...cause it just seemed like you were rushing too much to fits too many words into 1 bar....and delivery needs to be upped some...and youll be fresh as hell..... word
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12-11-05, 03:40 AM
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alright thanks for the feed.
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12-10-05, 07:52 PM
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Hey Ike, break down "Loving You" for me. And I'll give you a ajfghlkjdfg.
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12-11-05, 01:39 AM
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dude....cmon now....u know i love that song you bastard... i just wanna have sex with it....its so damn sexy....so fuck you and your feed...ill turn you into a walrus you sumna bitch [/insidejokes]
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