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Old 11-22-06, 05:36 PM   #1
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Daubs thx for da info fam omega set it up no pink slip battle set it up


Why, too Pussy? Punk ass E-Bitch
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Old 11-22-06, 05:52 PM   #2
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naw cause eryone d/r for yallz aint no doubt about that
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Old 11-22-06, 06:07 PM   #3
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naw cause eryone d/r for yallz aint no doubt about that


no its cuz u suck...quicker u get of RV the better
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Old 11-22-06, 06:07 PM   #4
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You piece of baby dick..
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Old 11-23-06, 02:45 AM   #5
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lemme spell this out for ya since u to stupid to know who u is fuccin wid Y.O.U. A.R.E. G.A.Y.
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Old 11-24-06, 03:00 PM   #6
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Kilo Tonz aint got shit on me u fucCin slobk tampon lookin mutha fucCa
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Old 11-24-06, 03:44 PM   #7
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r U Serious Dude u got problems U SUCK ya Fake
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Old 11-24-06, 03:49 PM   #8
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r U Serious Dude u got problems U SUCK ya Fake


word is bond...
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Old 11-26-06, 10:33 PM   #9
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This was decent.. flowed well.. metas were kinda shaky but not bad!
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Old 11-27-06, 11:33 AM   #10
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The word of the day is.... ELEVATION.

After reading this, I can say Shiest you need some serious elevation. You've got the concepts down straight, but you lack in the wording department. The wording is what makes the punch and at the moment some of your bars come off sounding awkward. Also, other bars come across too simplistic and a simplistic punch only works if it is really raw and packs a lot of humour.

If you were looking at this verse for audio then it would be nice. It flows well and has some punches, although they are not very strong punches. In text, there is a whole different style and you have to work on developing that style and increasing your ability to word punches better for maximum affect.

That is the truth. Don't take my words the wrong way like an NGN herb.
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Old 11-27-06, 12:29 PM   #11
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The word of the day is.... ELEVATION.

After reading this, I can say Shiest you need some serious elevation. You've got the concepts down straight, but you lack in the wording department. The wording is what makes the punch and at the moment some of your bars come off sounding awkward. Also, other bars come across too simplistic and a simplistic punch only works if it is really raw and packs a lot of humour.

If you were looking at this verse for audio then it would be nice. It flows well and has some punches, although they are not very strong punches. In text, there is a whole different style and you have to work on developing that style and increasing your ability to word punches better for maximum affect.

That is the truth. Don't take my words the wrong way like an NGN herb.


Wow that's the most positive advice you've given me, So their is a nyce guy behind that huge ego of yours lol. Good lookin' for the feed still
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Old 11-27-06, 01:23 PM   #12
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"Elevation" lets all I ever see when I receive feedback, I have no Clue what it means

*sigh* I could sure use a mentor...
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Old 11-28-06, 12:28 PM   #13
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this is pretty dope for a diss no joke i likes
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