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Old 02-14-09, 07:23 PM   #16
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Yessir, thanks a lot guys. Well I was kinda trying to be monotone on this since it's more of a commercial thing but I guess it didn't work in my favor, I don't care enough bout this to re-record with more emotion though haha. And aight thanks for letting me know the vocals are too loud, I'll remember that for my next track.

As for a better mic, im only getting one of those eventually along with the rest of my audio software I need to record better... and I don't mix my shit, don't know how, i'll learn eventually but til then my tracks got no mixing lol

how's the flow guys?

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I've noticed more underground shit is monotone than commercial. Typically the reason the rappers are mainstream are because of their Delivery+Flow. But this shit is pretty boring, like it really didn't bring me into it. Delivery is something you want to work on if you're trying to something commercial. Flow was okay, but you should def work on quality and delivery. That's the biggest thing.
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Old 02-14-09, 07:36 PM   #17
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I've noticed more underground shit is monotone than commercial. Typically the reason the rappers are mainstream are because of their Delivery+Flow. But this shit is pretty boring, like it really didn't bring me into it. Delivery is something you want to work on if you're trying to something commercial. Flow was okay, but you should def work on quality and delivery. That's the biggest thing.


Iunno fabolous and cassidy etc etc are pretty monotone, I just figured i'd go with that style, and this was semi underground semi commercial so yea

Glad the flow was ok, and I will work on my delivery but the quality aint changing anytime soon haha, i dont care
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Old 02-14-09, 09:29 PM   #18
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hahahahaha poor poor AJ



Lmfao.. @ your scrawny ass still.

poor poor Josh
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Old 02-14-09, 11:54 PM   #19
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Iunno fabolous and cassidy etc etc are pretty monotone, I just figured i'd go with that style, and this was semi underground semi commercial so yea

Glad the flow was ok, and I will work on my delivery but the quality aint changing anytime soon haha, i dont care



cassidy aint monotone, montone means lifeless and one steady tone instead of expression and shit. Very few rappers can pull monotone off, Guru from gangstar and tuna fish from jurrassic 5 are the only I can think of right now. Im not saying you are doing this but most people don't speak like that, it comes out when your reading or thinking real hard about it, memorizing and relaxing helps. Find your own style what works with your voice and your breathing capabilities, really the only thing that will help it is practice.
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Old 02-15-09, 02:59 AM   #20
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Lmfao.. @ your scrawny ass still.

poor poor Josh



You just fucking posted threads bout how you hated yourself and hated your life bro, and how adam was right and that you want everyone to call you a loser

you're fucking lame homie

and im in way better shape then your ass biotch, physically and mentally cuz you got issues
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Old 02-15-09, 03:01 AM   #21
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You just fucking posted threads bout how you hated yourself and hated your life bro, and how adam was right and that you want everyone to call you a loser

you're fucking lame homie

and im in way better shape then your ass biotch, physically and mentally cuz you got issues



hey you flaming faggot.

way better shape?!.....

ha! you havnt even seen me you fucking douche.

I can prove im bigger than your scrawny ass JTR.

and whats up with the Rat stache? LOL
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Old 02-15-09, 03:01 AM   #22
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You're getting a lot better bro, props.
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Old 02-15-09, 03:03 AM   #23
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You're getting a lot better bro, props.



not only do you talk to him like a faggot.

but your beginning to come out the closet too.
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cassidy aint monotone, montone means lifeless and one steady tone instead of expression and shit. Very few rappers can pull monotone off, Guru from gangstar and tuna fish from jurrassic 5 are the only I can think of right now. Im not saying you are doing this but most people don't speak like that, it comes out when your reading or thinking real hard about it, memorizing and relaxing helps. Find your own style what works with your voice and your breathing capabilities, really the only thing that will help it is practice.


Man lmao, I know what being monotone is, it's a simple word to understand. Cassidy is pretty mototone in a lot of his mainstream shit, thats my opinion and how a bunch of his stuff sounded to me, or atleast not completely monotone but a lot of monotoneness to his style, but yea
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Lol I was gon use this beat. Couldn't get a hook down tho.

but yea, i don't know hook seems out of place with the chorus switch on the beat. Delivery wasnt right for it.

First verse, lyrics were nice. Flow was on and off. Some parts nice, others a little off. Delivery tho too monotone. I don't think that kind of delivery fits this beat.

Second verse, lyrics coo here, but in end you def had way too many words per lines cuz you were rushing shit. And it just came out bad.

Third verse was better than 2nd, but not as good as first.

overall wasn't too bad. Better than your past shit tho.

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and who the fuck is that kevin homo?
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Old 02-15-09, 03:34 AM   #26
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Haha you know how I do, Shadowville got some cool shit... but yea, I had the chorus pre-thought out before hearing the beat, I looked through so many beats I could beat hook too and this was best I could find cuz I got tired of lookin, and this beat was hot too. And yea end of my 2nd verse when im like "I hit a clear bong while all of my peers watch" I get the dubbs off so it makes the flow sound funky, and I do rush a bit. But word, this shit only 6th track ive done and its already drastically better then my old shit so im happy bout it even tho it aint amazing

And that kevin dude is wack, some lame ass nerdy asian from a goody two shoe private school, him and chrystal are friends and iunno somehow got into some stupid joke but faking a marraige as a joke and she figured it was harmless cuz dude is nerdy and no game, no racism but she isnt attracted to asian dudes cuz they aint her type and hes a geek anyways lol, but i told her it was buggin me so they breaking up their "engagement"
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LOL all I remember is seeing "There's a party in my pants, and you know you're invited"

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I've noticed more underground shit is monotone than commercial. Typically the reason the rappers are mainstream are because of their Delivery+Flow.

Hahahahaha.
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Old 02-15-09, 12:26 PM   #29
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yea -_-, fuck em
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I enjoyed it. Lyrics were pretty funny. I don't like the hook very much though. Flow at some parts sounded off but still a good listen.
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