thanks for da responses ... still uppin

umm yo vocab was shit, and whats this fuck about ppl sayin white ppl cant rap there's tons of white rappers with skill, u shuld get banned fo thinkin that u can make songs that say that "yea i'm white but people doubt me" and shit liek that

Im not saying that all people think that am i .. no!

DoNt Fukin sleep on this

returning the favor...

this was OK... you still new so its alright... work on ya vocab, throw some multis in there and you'll be a vet in no time!

ok thanks:d

tRiLL leave tha kid alone thats his first eva rhyme he feels like this in his area so what he is rapping about is what he feels. so doint say its shit ive seen some of ur shit & it a\int that good m8.

Dont was tyte I was feelin it props to ya man

Thanks man .. still uppin

St|ll uppin

I agree with fat man.. I ain't gonna give no props on this.. shit was weak.. not 'cause your white, I am too.. you need some serious elevation to ever think about not being laughed at.. sorry but it's true.. look at the quality of the rhymes from people who actually get mad props from vets, then compare to yours.. you suck.. sorry but that's why they call me BLuNT.. htat's why there's something called elevation..

1: your bars are too short (so are your verses)
2: no-word play at all, no sick multies
3: some lines don't rhyme, maybe they do with your accent but not with mine
4: using simple rhyme words like "Bangin', Hangin, or Faces, Races" is elementary.. it's alright to use them but u use simple structure like that thru-out..
5: keep it simple, you're trying to be complex but you havn't reached that levle yet..

^ that should help a-bit

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