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05-31-03, 08:52 PM
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thanx zainy,,
uppin 4 more feedbackk---how could i improve this---what would have made it better.... learnin---- peace |
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05-31-03, 09:17 PM
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aight well to be honest i thought this was all a bit simple i mean ya did throw inquite a few multies its just they were quite simple words. it was aight and ya flow was consistent just ya really gotta put in some more complex thought and rhyme scheme into this
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