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U hate boring deep shit...Maaybe none of yall shit get stickied because it aint deep.... aNY way this was a dope peice really enjoyed it.........U guys dope as fuck...............Keep spittin and will somebody please Bann Blunt......
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^ Lol, He Cant Be Banned For His Opinions, But Thanks For The Props!
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..A New Breed of Femcee..
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IP: C1DA C961
Great collabo fellaz.
Everyone brought a crucial aspect to the table, different yet similar in overall themes.. Baron~ "shown notions of better life, the wedded wife, a wealthy man so now im allowing fate to Lend a Hand to my Self Demands. my Selfish Plans too Travel Far and Wide, Re-Start my Life and decorate each Darkened Night w/ a stars Sparkling Light." Great multi's. Stunning Imagery also. "Fly doves for symbols of peace, im the symbol of all thats lost, so i'll burn my Bridges to make sure im never Double Crossed. ." Nice symbolism and reference to the title...really set the stage for the next couple stanzas. You are an amazing writer. Clockword~ "My bridge's reduced to ash's,all that remain's are backflash's Now the only way is forward,Heading the way the wind lash's" Once again, great flow and picture perfect imagery..especially in this line: "I've disturbed the god's,.. a storm gather's up in the cloud's Dark & twisted, should evil prevail, releasing out hell's hound's" You added a great flair to this collab. Nice writez, no doubt. Tikki~ "i've burnt bridges to leave all my emotions stranded and i burnt myself to leave all my memories branded." Wow..really powerful line there..while the first two verses seemed more focused on the physicality of the "burnt bridges" yours seemed more centered on the emotional half..if that made any sense at all.. "a past i cant escape- a love for heat with deep lashes and so it ends like the bible- dust to dust- ashes to ashes" Great way to end the verse..reference to the bible adds to the intensity of the overall feeling of the verse. Nicely done. AxL~ After the second or third line of this verse..i was like, what the hell does this have to do with anything?? It seemed like you got off topic to me, but maybe it relates in some way I'm just missing..It was a nice verse, good flow and bars, just didnt seem to fit in with the tone of the previous 3 verses... So Anyway... Nice collab..Great concept, well executed. Propz to all participants. It was a pleasure to read. peace. Last edited by DaGyrlRemarqabL : 08-22-03 at 06:47 PM. |
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I'm Better Than You
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IP: 6100 DD08
da first verse wuz da greatest shit i seen in a while...every verse wuz real ill but da first stoodout a lil more den da othas...best flow... da last one wuz funny, braggin and humblness and all dat... whos wuz da fist tho??
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Dope Open Mic .. everything in each and every one of there verses shows what a true open mic / verse should have .. the imagery, use of words, and flow just made this longer piece easy to read .. I agree with Bash when you mentioned the first line, that really held me into reading it .. you guys definitly have talent and showed it here .. 10//10
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it started off good like:
"I burnt the bridges, golden hopes revoked my old devotion now prone and hopeless, out of focus w/ my own emotions." thats good word play, i like that type of rhyme sceam. but when i started reading more it fell off, not in the sence that it got weak but it didnt get better, it more or less just stayed the same. the second verse......something about wind lashing on a bridge, then: "An eternal struggle, my journey for my promised land begun.. I cannot run, but only take my awaited problems as they come" thats iight but corny at the same time. then there was something about gods and it being dark with demons, then to cash, then evil......i dunno, i droped tha blunt an burnt myself, after that i lost track of where i was and went to the next verse. 1 of my favorite mc's is "Kool G Rap" i love his rhymeing style, so i liked this verse the most out the whole thing: "I think I'm the best, I'm being humble, yes A bless with my text until I corrupted the net" i was feelin this 2: "Used to get high enough to jump off the sun and dunk" hahahaha.............L's an blunts stays geekt. all out, i feel that the 3rd verse had the best medophores, an ended it nicely. even tho i aint feel deep shits an this was deep shits, this was "good", and its an iight collabo. real critic hater need love to |
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my feedback:
not bad from all of you, but if verses had an ass camaracs literally shitted on the other ones. lol he others were ok, u want honest feedback thats it... camaracs had stunning multies and imagery. you are the weakest link, godbye... |
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^ Thank You My Man, But Yeah, Its Kind Of Tradition I Outshine Kids In Collabs = )
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IP: 4577 CD9A
Damm... I remember when I got a sticky... I miss those days... lol... oh shit, yo man, this shit was hot... I was definitely feeling the concept of it, liked the whole metaphore with the tittle and shit... pretty deep, the story was structured well and all, had strong vocab, and it flowed nicely... did kinda get me a bit bored at points... but thas just me, I still see it as a tight drop...
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everyone has read this already, sloth ticklers!
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^hoe ass nigga.com
but word, this was stickied waaaaaaaaay too long. .
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