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Old 08-26-03, 08:52 PM   #1
Pre Tense
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I will circumcise u, Annihilate u
And when I'm done kickin your ass, I'll clean your blood up wit you
I wont go down
But u will
Down on me as Im fuckin u wit my skill
My words are strong and raw and potent
It hurts already wit me kickin ya down now don't it
Soak it up,
cause I'm not even close to becomin done
But when I am you'll know it
Cause your pussies gonna hurt u gotta have one
To be fuckin wit me the way u be
The way u opennin u mouth like u a celebrity
Get a life U fuckin nobody
You'll never have the fuckin talent to kill me
This is bullshit
I know u aint wantin none a this
U aint even worth the urinal that I piss in
Lil hommo hug, hug, kiss, kiss (mwwwwa)
I'll give it to u straight and simple
Wit my dimples, I will pop your head like a pimple
Like RumpleStilskin
Rap my rhyme around your neck, keep ya spinnin
Round and round like a 50 meter runner who is winnin
I wont budge
I wont wanna know why? cuz
In this reality your just a little spec of dust
For me to step on
And make room for the rest of us
Your no distraction, your not even an obstacle
But U will be in traction when my shit gets fuckin ethical
Incredible
I eat your fuckin brains for lunch like there wack shit was edible
I'm tellin ya
I will kill ya muthafuckin ass
So bring it on cause my dope shit is finally done at last
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Old 08-26-03, 09:43 PM   #2
shiznit
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There's no hurt in trying at all. I mean at least you had to guts to post your stuff on here even if you know that you have to be ready for critisms either good or bad.

Alright, here's the thing...Your chosen terms are not well enough thought out. Much more basic than simple. The diss interpretation was kinda weak. You couldve put better metas for your wordplay. It would strengthen some of them as a whole.

To be honest..it had some weaker points and flaws. Not gonna hurt if you ask for help. Everyone can help.
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