severe
i'll tell u now i got the magic stick like harry potter and his magic wand
ur a fake, like a black girl thats a natural blonde
~second line made me laff 5/10~

u need to elevate, step ur rhymes up a notch
ur whiter then those dudes on malibus most wanted....B-Yatch
~u need to elevate 3/10~

ur verses are like lil kids nersery rhymes bout the a-b-c's
i rhyme better then eminem, and he rocs the mic with E's (eaze)
~nursery ryhmes line are played, 3/10~

like my lyrics were in brail, the way people feal-my-rhymes
people think ur a jealous fishermen the way u wanna steal-my-lines
~nice line better than the rest of ya verse, 7/10~

Oli dog:
ok severe lyrics im gna injure you *severly*,
ill pounce with my lyrics boy, so you better fuckin *fear me*,
~not the best of openers 5/10~

ill spit my lynes twice, so i make sure you fuckin *hear me*,
after i finnish my rap i sign it of, with im "sorry i beat you" and i meen that *sincerly*,
~aiight 5/10~

this peadophile likes to do stupid shit, like merkin lil *kids*(check profile),
he takes them home and, produces them in his porno *vids*,
~lol, nice personal 7/10~

*syke*, fuck that im up for a *fight*,
oh and *right*, i dont throw punches ill just hit you, on the *mike*(mic).
~nah 3/10~

Severe:18/20
Oli:20/20


severe: u need to elevate, jus keep battlin an doin wat ya doin, try to come up wit lines that arent played dawg, like 'nursery ryhmes' lines.

Oli:i seen some of ur other battles, that are aiight, this is probs ur weakest, u need to work on ur openers an finishers.


hit this up wen ya hav a chance plz
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=84191

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