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11-26-03, 03:38 PM
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That was really good there was a couple of lines that I didn't think flow as well as I would have preffered but it had alot of heart. Can I ask you a personal question you said that the girl had one arm is that a metaphor or truth. any ways that was deep Good one can you check out my Forever My Homie
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Let God speak for the underground Psalm 49 16-17 16 Do not be overawed when a man grows rich when the splendor of his house increases 17 For he will take no thing with him when he dies, his splendor will not descend with him 18Though while he lived he counted himself blessed - and men praise you when you prosper- 19 He will join the generation of his fathers, who will never see the light of life 20 A man who has riches without understanding is like the beasts that perish |
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11-26-03, 07:00 PM
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yup thats for real man..she only got one half of her arm..and one full one...but she still a hotty..uppen this pz
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Open Mics The Weathers Art http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673 My Teenage Eyes http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850 Secluded http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851 Open Your Eyes http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461 |
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11-27-03, 02:06 AM
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that was a Tight Piece.....i could feel ya in that.......u could of doen a lot betta Jokez LoL.......ill give ya 8/10
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11-27-03, 07:16 AM
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fuck you....that one arm thing wasnt a joke....pz
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Open Mics The Weathers Art http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673 My Teenage Eyes http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850 Secluded http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851 Open Your Eyes http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461 |
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11-27-03, 07:23 AM
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pretty good kid
structure and flow was nice...liked thta although some of the follow on internal rhymes seemed a bit forced at times and the word choice was a bit meh however i liked the content was well written on the whole some nice imagery piece |
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11-27-03, 07:56 AM
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i agree this was pretty tight, some nice vocab......good structure....nice rhyming......some did seem a little forced but on the whole i liked it....good drop.......Pz
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11-27-03, 04:03 PM
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thanks fgee and devo thats apreciated
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Open Mics The Weathers Art http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673 My Teenage Eyes http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850 Secluded http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851 Open Your Eyes http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461 |
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