thanx peepz^ much appreciation. glad to hear that you guys like it.
seriously. thanx again. stay coo
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peace

I liked it......though I think you could have had more of a story laced within it.....an intricate story with plot development and such....oh well.....my only complaint.....too short....

otherwise it was pretty dope......the simple rhyme structure worked and flowed well for the perspective of a child trying to cope with fighting parents I'm assuming.....

^for sum reason i keep my rhymes short like that. i dunno.
maybe the next one i write i'll try extending it. but thanx
man. i appreciate it.
peace

yea i found that real Simple ....Pretty good read....ya structure was one of the good things...Ya Flow was good...Your rhyme scheme was okay....there was a Lack of Multis.....all and all a good read Peace
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Very heavy piece here, Ace.
To be honest, I didn't catch the meaning until I saw your footnote.
Thanks for adding that, once you did.
Damn...
I totally understood.

Good flow, real easy to read and rap to.

Nice complexity, subtle meaning, I'm sorry I mised it at first read.

Good vocab, ya went dictionary, but not ultra dictionary.
(I hate it when I see words in shit that no one would ever normally say)

Damn nice way of conveying emotion with this.

8/10

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