virtue...wtf....^^...go battle or something ya last 150 posts consist of..you suck...this is wack.....structure was off...you never explain shit..i aint hatin on you but seriously some constructive critisism would go a long way....go get laid dawg...

(INTRODUCTION)
Some times in life,,,we all have a problem's we dont start.
but if you have faith,,God will see you through it.
Follow me on this one...and lets spread the love...

(VERSE)

Im cruising down the high way,,Looking out the window.
Just getting off work,,Life sure went fast when I was little.
^^ nice intro...good rhymin..
Stopping at the light
A man walks by holding some pipes..
And then the other guy screams...
Move your ass aight!
I could see the pain in his face,,He really wanted to quit,
but he got a family to support,,So he couldn't do shit.
^^good point dawg.......
Education puts us all in a place where we cant follow.
It's like Jesus in the sky,,we got to wait till tomorrow,
In order to earn our keep to sit on the thrown
^^could've rhymed better ta keep the flow....
Nothing comes easy,,Thats why we got to work
and sweat hard for the pieces.
Life is Jesus.
The light turn's green,,,I pull off and greet him.
Going down the road,,,
I see some body having problem's breathing.
It wasn't asthma attack
he just robbed some body,,and put a knife in there back
and now he wondering why his life like that.
The cop's catches up,,and slams him on the ice like pack's
Im speeding up on the gas,,just to get away from this trash!
^^^nie imagery..cool story so far..
Making a dash down the high way!,,Two miles later.
Remembering what my momma taught
and that respect is the greatest.
^^haha...2 true..
Some times I have to think back
To keep my heart beat tapping,,To get away from the madness.
Just so i can be happy,,IM over whelmed by the sadness.
And crying tears of joy, Is no longer.
all I need is strength,,So I can be stronger.
^^losing the story line a bit...
Im feeling like my chest has gone flat.
It's kind of like,, hell on earth
Because all i've seen is my people getting hurt.

^^^good return..
Im roling up my window's now,,because the rain begain to fall.
The winds is blowing hard,,Now every body trying to get home.
My wife called on the cell phone.
baby where you at!,,Screaming in panic!
I told her it's gone be a good minute.
^^^rhyme scheme was a bit off....
The signal is lost and it wasn't safe,,to talk on the phone.
The rain begain to fall harder
And I couldn't see to move on.

I slowed down on the gas,,and pressed lighty on the brakes,
but any harder,, would've made me slide like ice skates!
^^nice
The car behind me blowing his horn,,Trying to get pass me!
Sticking his fingers out the wind,,Only trying to be nasty!
^^lol
Throwing a bottle at the car behind him.
He doesn't give a fuck about nobody els!
but then,,,thats when trouble finds him!

The man gets up out of his ride,,and he said...
Look at the dent you put in my car!
Then walks up and blows a hole in his head!
^^structures fallin apart cause of the middle line...
I sat back in my ride,,,Like i didn't see shit!
He walked up and peeped me,,and said..
Yo hommie,,,This is now our secret,, I frowned in agreement
Praying that he wouldn't shoot me
The rain was so thick,,,I really couldn't see his face trully!
^^^this was really good...
He opens his door and get's back in his ride
Then hits hit's reverse!
If it wasn't for the rain,,,I know I would've got hurt!
^^koo
but since he new I didn't see his face
he put the pump away,,Sweat running down my sleeves.
And I had my gun on my seat,,The rain was to thick to see!
But since he didn't shoot me,,
The threat alone was enough for me to pull out my golden oozie,,!
God had to choose me,,because the devil didn't win
I could have been a dead man, with my gun in my hands!
I was born a thug,,but God redirected my plans,,an showed me how to love
An thats how im learning to stand

^^ a bit mixed but it was ok
I got out my car,,an fell down on my knee's,,Started to pray.
The power of faith,,God came in an saved me today,If I was to say,
That It wasnt so,,,Then im a lier,,God came an took me from the streets,,
an saved me from the fire

^^structure again dawg......
The sun begain to come out
I called my wife on the phone
She cried,,after I told her what hapened,,,And said to come home.
My son is in the back ground screaming
Momma wheres dad at,,and droped his soda
She held him and said..The storm is over

^^^nice story....good plot...keep it up dawg jus try n fix what i mentioned...pc

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left...2 many herbs

Thanks thats all I ever asked 4,,,is honesty,,,
BUT I GOT SOMETHING FOR THOSE HATERS,,I'LL BE RIGHT BACK,
ITS CALLED THE TRUTH ABOUT HATERS,,,ALONE WITH OTHER THINGS I ADDED TO IT MAKING IT A PRETTY GOOD POINT,,,,THE TRUTH IS ALL I KNOW...GOD BLESS THOSE WHO SUPPORT TRUTH AND HONESTY,,,,1 LUV

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My level of battle
is your problem.
Not minds.
So dont toss me
till to you tried me.
This is my ring.
You cant box me.
I'll drop rocky.
I've climbed the mountain's
Making all contenders obsolete.
All you bitches is running like
water fountain
knocking me!!

Defeat list
Young Beezy
out come:5-o
Lost Battles:none
out come
none

1~uppin This Shit.........4 Honest Feedback

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left...2 many herbs

Hey mask I noticed you really like my work,,,because its still on the site bitch,!!,,
An if you can see I dont give a fuck,!!,,I want my flows OFF OF THIS GOT DAUM SITE,,,AND I WANT IT DONE NOW ,,,,SINCE YOUR GOD AN ALL
YOUR A little ass kid still at home in your room with picture of scooby doo on your wall...
AN yet your trying to be a man,,,,please dont make me laugh bitch,,,LMAO
Go find a sand box to play in boy

__________________
My level of battle
is your problem.
Not minds.
So dont toss me
till to you tried me.
This is my ring.
You cant box me.
I'll drop rocky.
I've climbed the mountain's
Making all contenders obsolete.
All you bitches is running like
water fountain
knocking me!!

Defeat list
Young Beezy
out come:5-o
Lost Battles:none
out come
none

aight

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Clcik Hear To Hear My Music

i was feelin it cuz he is a ha ha

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Lyrical Materminds

BigBootyChick

An what the fuck do you mean ha ha!!!!!!,
Im on the Got daum war path!!!,
And im not in the mood for bitches talking shit,
out the side of there muthafuckin lips!!

__________________
My level of battle
is your problem.
Not minds.
So dont toss me
till to you tried me.
This is my ring.
You cant box me.
I'll drop rocky.
I've climbed the mountain's
Making all contenders obsolete.
All you bitches is running like
water fountain
knocking me!!

Defeat list
Young Beezy
out come:5-o
Lost Battles:none
out come
none