quit sleeping yall up up up!

up up up!

Returning the favor

This was striaght man. I like the visuals you put forth on here. NAd you stayed on the topic through out the whole thing and kept my interest. Rhyme scheam could have been a little better but if you keep spittin you'll pick up alot of that type of stuff.

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Bang On The Table Productions

thanks for the feedback dizzle...
up up up!

damn yo! i wish i could rip shit like that homie, you's the reallest and illest killah, fo' real!! hit me ^ when u get a chance homie! fo real!!

much, much respect....peace

damn i the replies ive got aint what i expecrted at all,i dunno maybe i hate everything i write or osmething,but thanks for hte comments yall,up up up

that was some disease shit right there...damn dunny that shit was on some other shit...you made a good visual landscape thru your words...i like shit like that....nice piece...keep droppin shit like that yo...much respect...one

A'othobillah min al shaitan al rageem

man thanks yall for your comments,honestly wasnt expecting any good comments,but thanks fo rht elove yall...
bismillah ir rahmaan ir raheem

up up up up up uppin,come on yall,hit this up somethin

sic shit. i enjoy this so much more when it is about REAL SHIT. you tell the real truth. wah lakum salaam.

shookran sadeekee roux,im starting to like my spit now also,thanks for the feedback,hopin for more from othe rmembers at osme point,70 odd veiws 24 replies or osmething,ratio dont add up but its all good,least someones feeling my shit...
bismillah

Aight man, I've been busy now I can reply to this as well..



The opening was nicely done, had some nice visuals there, flow was smooth as well.

"theyll bust your murderer after hes killed you to maintain//"
^ Thing is that line there seemed not to fit into the piece at all, overall though it came out nicely enough to give the reader a good view of what is going on....



I know it's quite a bit to quote, but the thing is that this is how imagery is done, the lines here were woven nicely and added that storytelling element here, I liked that part.



Again nice imagery, these lines were done good, really good man, I was feelin' that intro the second verse, although I wasn't feeling that break up a bit, this came out and on strong, nice, vocab was enough to make this piece flow well as well as the imagery added something nice too. Sorry I can't really go into much detail I have to get back to work soon seeing how this is my "lunch break", but... uh yeah, there you go man, nice piece, keep on writtin kidd...

love...

damn thanks for the feedback rhombus,the bust the murder thing,i was refering to the police,the vultures,circle you till you mess up and theyll bite you,or in some cases ive witnessed,theyll wait till the danger has gone to enforce their laws,the murderer,theyll only arrest the murderer after hes killed you,to keep themselves alive,maintain...i thought the line was a bit off myself but i kept it in cozi knew what i was saying,thanks for the feedback...

bismillah

we got collab on some " gis rasum min noos "...namsayin...hit me with a pm dunny...one