haha...no disrespect to Edicius....but this is a complete suprise to me....i've read over both thoroughly and i honestly can say your piece was rushed, half of the words are miss spelled alot of the words dont even fit or relate to the content of the piece.... Saying my piece wasn't deep enough..you need a little medicine...h this is a sad day in America...votingmust go on...word

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Erm swayin?

W/e man ...

Spellin errors, ..is in my case normal^lol but their arent to much..and it wsnt rushed...
And sayin it wsnt relate?...
....lol^^this is funny 4 real...i never said ur piece wsnt deep nuff, ...

Topic Obedient mind

My verse was my view on obedient minds...

I dont know what u talkin about

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not you man.....someone else said...not intending to sway at all...having sureal's vote alone will sway some votes for you..no worries...

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Man the fact he voted for me is a suprise, ...

He hates me..^

Now u talkin bout urs was better 'no worries', ...what bout that?...

Man...its all coo^ with me, ...do w.e u want...

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deacon.. stop swaying.
dont be a hoe.. i dont like them..
although i did think you won .

deacon- kept it short and sweet. a good read. rhymed, nice font (lol). good imagery, let me use my imagination.

edicus - urs was also good. seemed rushed and forced. probably not nearly your best. a bit too long... shoulda kept it short like deacon's.. good imagery, not quite as good as deacons .

vote- deacon.

I also felt that Edicius's verse had forced elements. Some hesitations, then you'll have points with too many words stringed together. There's no need for some 4 adjectives attacking me at once. A good deal of the message was very nice, but the presentation put me off a little. Mispelling is okay, but only as long as you can still immediately decipher the correct word, or the mispelling allows the reader to pronounce it the same. Were and where are different words. Deacon's was nice and simple. Cool presentation as an outside source. The technical elements were on point, he didn't make many "mistakes".

Oh, and chill out with the arguing/swaying stuff. Both of you have very true and valid points, but bottle it, it's off-putting.

Vote-Deacon.

yeah...i agree..i got upset and i let it get to my head....sorry man..lets keep these votes coming...

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Deacon- Very poetic. I really enjoyed reading your piece, and I thought the bar with the whole time acronym was really dope. Your metaphors were good, and your flow worked well. A little short though. Don't sway anymore or I'll have to pimpslap your beatnick ass =)

Edicius- Shitty assed flow. Word on your flow. If your flow is terrible, it in turn makes the piece terrible, or at least closer to terrible than it is to dope. You had some very nice lines with very nice wordplay, however you forced your vocab so it made your flow wack. I think if you had taken the time to play around with your words, this had potential for dopeness.

vote-deacon

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Oh well , thats ur opinon , ...under, oldo in my opinion , ..it wsnt forced, ..it maybe looks to u like it is but its not, ..

When u use high vocab , ...dsnt mean its forced, its writin, not audio..and i think the flow restored at the end of the lines, ..but its to bad, that when u have hard words, in a row, people think its forced, ...

But 3-2 Deacons way...

U had a nice verse, ..poetic,..and short, ..but to me it wsnt totally on topic, ..but still a nice piece...

Up^

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I feel the same way. I think the first kat, deacon, was deeper than needed and I feel the story line thing more. Thought it was nice though. Edicius just seemed to relate to the reader more and felt more solid.

PS: Dont know too much about topicals like this but what feels better thus... i have to go.

vote - edicius

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deeper than needed.wtf...Obedient minds= deep subject...blah blah you suck and what not....hah and the not on topic comment...hmmm..im trying to think where its not on topic....cant find it...
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Already commented that I liked both pieces.......

But I just felt deacons more...

Nothing against either both cause both were nice...

Just deacon's connected with me better