im new and not that good trying to get better so im just gonna freestyle some shit so here:

to many heads think they sick stay in bed
cuz with a chop neck the only time you can get a-head
the kid is here showing some skills
ready for a kill are you serious? nah keep popin them phill's
you aint the cops, you cant make me stop
so draw'in dot's the only time you had a spot
i got the green for pot-heads and white for dust-heads
and being a fag the only time you spit at good-head
every punchline dont need to hit
but if you feel my bars then everything lagit
nah? then its a 100 shots from a singel clip
tommy gun, make me feel like am part of the mafia click

what do you think?

^^ I thought it was pretty good but i think u should drop an open mic to get more critiqued

i dispose of my foes and move 'em like some chess pieces
and i stalk u like crows makin u lay down and rest in peace
welcome to the deceased where im killin all the priests
comin for u next betta start prayin before the guns release
sprayin bullets the size of fruits this is my life with mics
filetin people like fish stabbin them with some spikes
ignite the fire for my desire burnin all the liars and fiends
such a horrifying scene kinda like a nightmarish dream
get the key and pop the trunk get out and rock the pump
box out the chumps finish them off and the bodies i dump

this aint livin i be all up in the kitchen, sittin and bitchin
people get on ur nerves and make u wanna start snitchin
livin in worlds of crime and confusion u never winnin
always losin strayin from the right line just spinnin
i despise the lies i was told like i would never figure it out
wasnt raised a fool now i get crunk quicker than the south
took a different route now im ready to fly like a bird
writin words till i fall out now differently i look at the curb
and i see hidden messages and im feelin reckless
and yet this pain and anger and u cant detect this
keeps comin back with some more traps and facts
showin me the true tracks the real money stacks
my life is going up and down like oceans and pistons
and no ones helpin me they pass by and dont listen

its like i got tons of stuff to say but cant fit it in a verse
so many people i know died from guns its like im cursed
life cant get any worse, and weed cant help me relacks
to drunk to sip another shot, and my little brother holding a gat
what the fuck wrong with this picture?
its like even when my girl there, i still feel like i miss-her
exscuse me mister mister, *YEA* why your heart cold like the winter?
WTF? get out my face, cuz this led i got wont leave a splinter
but'll leave ya permanitly injured ,and who the fuck with ya?
parranoid as fuck, thinking niggas done set me up,
the gat slip-up, drop and then things pick'ed up
and a couple of rounds went, couple of clouds-mist
that'll have ya life-line look'in like an earthquake rictor-scale
the cops come, a man down, now im thinking of bail
but then thats a extra life sentence tale
since i went to the bookin yell'in, im fuckin everything that aint male
but since there so many fucking SHE-MALES its hard to tell
so im black'in the fuck befor someone can ask for my shower-gel
toss me in the hole, or im straight shiting on my-self
no expression, just a confession that my SHIT smell
so if you oppose,
then ya moms gonna be at wal-mart pick'in up some get-well
hit me up on my nextel
and i would hit ya, but you'll be the next-to-tell
but i dont give a FUCK.. about NONE OF YOU NIGGAS
so dont make me put the gun to you niggas.. YA HERD
I HAD ENOUGH!!!

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NOT TO BE FUCKED WITH!!!!

always rainin on me like theres a cloud over my head
stress keeps me from rest so loud will i end up dead
try to sleep but i hear too many peeps and it keeps
back so many feet contained by dark like the Grim Reap
holdin its scythe while levitatin and movin rollin its pipe
ponderin about life testin to see developed like its ripe
i wake up from my dream screamin and now im schemin
now makin my team to protect me from fiends while leanin
i got a pistol and dagger under my pillow fully loaded
no dismissal one eye open just in case i gotta unload it
blastin in the dark makin it look like a firework display
lastin for the night the question is will i live another day

i invision a head on collision with proper precision
from both sides like a split decision
part of my mission is to tain top rank position
and if you get in the mix'in, ya life i'll get cut the fuck-off like circumcision
you see how im hurt'in ya wisdom, since birth you would list'in
got the confey flow like am fishy'in, while you look burnt like ben wallace from the piston
see you nigga thought i wouldnt shyne like i was down with puffy
but thrust me, my custy love me, cuz my bag like new pillows nice and fluffy
and if you around to witness my girl then youre lucky
cuz my doll a killah like the bride of chucky
i never been know to fuck with feeds, but if your an informent
thats ya jaw-bent, i'll smash ya soft-cheast, and thats befor the torment
cuz you'll be taking shot like you want to get more bent
chop your fingers off and dip ya hand in bleach,
and leave ya body remains in those mall vents

holla

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NOT TO BE FUCKED WITH!!!!

no one likes to drop in here??

Dont freepost

-ysd@-

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NOT TO BE FUCKED WITH!!!!

ei get home no be postin in the freestyle cypher
cuz all these people wearin diapers never mess with lifers
all the newcomers be all up in the freestyle
cuz they free to be wild and dont get put on trials
yes rexless no one posts except me, u , and a couple others
we together all the time we should be like brothers
man this freestyle sucks but i didnt wanna freepost
so i made this up while i was eatin some toast

that sucked lol but yea no one really posts in here a lot

good look on the advice but i guess i gotta be nice
and not free post here twice but thats life
shit hard and parents dont make it easyer
so many problems i cant believe im HERE
but im waste'in my time and a couple of bars
but guess i gotta spit and still go hard
cuz i aint gonna stop till i own property on mars
so my next trip aint o.t, i'll be O.P transportin my car *outta (this) plent*
fuck catch'in a scar, see my leve to far
cuz im on some other shit, like flyin by a shooting star

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NOT TO BE FUCKED WITH!!!!

writin poetry be my thing and hearin the emotions it brings
smoothly flowin like its singing no interruptions no rings
from the phone cuz im going on and on till i break
i cross out mistakes i wonder if this is gonna be my fate
fillin pages like im typin an essay straight killin the stages
it aint the dark ages so i engage sages to up my wages
so wise so i try to multiply coins into some dollar bills
i hear cries from lies they defy so they just run up the hills
tryin to escape from the confused walls and the bruise halls
abuse calls to stop u from fallin thru some fools stall
get up dont crawl keep it movin stand up like a true man
a true stand man a superman i see u and just say damn

back in time unable to detect like im some fine lines
protect the selected and show a little bit of kind signs
crime rises as u go to the future let the calamity be filled
rhymes suprise cuz the horror is kinda like amityville
the killed were good souls without any kind of control
filled with lies and they cried but they stayed bold
and went against the normal tried to rise and revolutionize
but like i said they died cuz their enemy was bigger in size
they didnt go in peace they were executed by their own police
thats not even the least cuz thier tru enemy was a beast
first locked them in jails and of course there was no bail
they burst and popped from torture they prayed to the Holy Grail
hopin they would be freed and once again be able to lead
their people to better places see better faces and feed
themselves without havin to worry about closure and rules
livin free sometimes actin like fools but dont worry it'd be cool
no more killin no more villians gettin out and away with trials
have plains and fields to roam unlike a city with aisles
live longer and have happy lives instead of the crappy lies
fun and free what everyone should be no need to despise

had to drop at least a freestyle for the first day of december
i hope it dont flop listenin to the clock go tick tock to remember
that i had a drivin hour today but he had to cancel
cuz he forgot that he didnt put out the fire below his mantel
and im listenin to Cassidy and R. Kelly in thier Hotel
make me wanna go tell my girl about going to a motel
and havin a good time with some hood rhymes from the radio
they payin me on the low just to freestyle on the radio
call me dahmer cuz im tryin to eat and calm her
but she kept fuckin around so i just straight bombed her
and im not talkin about that stuff called skeet skeet
im talkin about killin people while the sleep in their sheets
kinda got off topic cuz i wanna to rocket to the sky
so i'll say goodbye and like an eagle its away i fly

I'll drop a freestyle aswell, through the miles of hell
so my profile is classified inside of this well,
I've constantly tried to expell, the external eyes through the cell
and it always seems to return through the skys, I can tell
my guys arn't swell, they'll kidnap you for free,
leave you in the back of a jeep, with your knee caps in your teeth
jeez, if that wasn't deep, we'll slice you in half in the street
until the cops need a fucking map to find your ass on the beat..
I'm dope', I mean it I am, I' was seeded from Sam...
to be a deviant man, to incorporate hey-ness or the evilest plans..
Indeed, it's the can.. fam, I'll be damned if your great...
if you are, you'll be scammed and grand slammed through the gates
of hell, where ya ass will be outplanned to escape
you'll be damaged and scraped into a damn ham sandwich for apes
I can tell you a fan of my estate, so please leave a resume
next to they, food for thought if the maids have an extra tray..
I've thrown text away, and traded it for these extra legs
with extra free estrogen, resting in my whole body excellence

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in the back of the bus i attack right on top of the cusp
they lack the lust that i have, i just leave 'em and they rust
break down like chemicals well look at the stakes now
im exposin the fakes now that hide in the dark of ur town
im sparkin around faster than light im crashin ur might
destroyin everything in sight hittin and bashin ur life
gettin rid of my strife and stress my life without rest
im not in a good mood so dont test i'll peel off ur flesh
and turn i'll get the gas and let u burn in ur house
im deterin the route there is no concern and i wont douse
the flames they couldnt even identify u even if i gave ur name
splattered brains everywhere but the matter still remains
that im the only witness that was around with this
im actin listless as i walk crossin ur name off my hit list