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Untraceable | 4 | 44.44% | |
FlOw InTeLLiGeNt | 5 | 55.56% | |
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03-14-05, 03:42 PM | #31 | ||||
I walk & walk over you
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IP: 1DCE 52A0
Voted For: Untraceable
Untraceable-Wow!, Good verse mane. The emotion was good and pure, i felt the narrator in this peice. Even though you didn't rhyme much in places, i think it flowed good mane. Creativity was decent. Vocab was good and you use them pretty well, cause some of the topical heads i battle use the word in a "wrong sentence" But you man, used it pretty well. Imaginary was Good, keep it up. Flow-Pretty good verse mane. A little bit of lacking in the emotion. Great flow. The imaginary was good i could actually see in my mind with your words. Vocab was decent and used correctly. Overall=This is an hard battle here, but i'mma vote. Untracable great verse with emotion and imaginary. Flow Intelligent good verse with imaginary but you a little bit lacked in emotion and i felted untracable emotion came harder than your's so that's why i'm voting for untracable. Pz
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03-16-05, 01:33 AM | #32 | |||
As Seen On T.V.
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IP: 5867 FD83
Voted For: FlOw InTeLLiGeNt
ok ok... here here untraceable: hot hot hot, i liked the imagery used... the only trouble with reading your wonderful verse was the fact the fidel vocab stunted me, word? im not telling you to completely change your style, im not even telling you to change your style at all, im just saying that i was hindered from the overral piece by the extensive use of vocabulary. i think every style of topical is beautiful, there is no right style, but when you vote, you vote what you feel more. and im gonna have to give it to flow because i was feeling his flow, and his easy read, the performance level was difficult to judge, but im still going with flow, had great struct and awesome perspective. used every advantage. and killed it, nice verses to both, goin with flow. vote/ flow.
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03-16-05, 10:00 AM | #33 | |||||||
..Rv Sucks..
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IP: C34C 4F12
aiight thanks for the honest vote.....and mayb sometime we shall topical....when i get some of my battles closed....but thanks again for the honest vote....their always appreciated
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03-18-05, 10:24 AM | #34 | |||||||
..Rv Sucks..
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IP: C34C 4F12
uppin lets get this closed already
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03-19-05, 12:19 AM | #35 | |||||||
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This was feedback posted for Untraceable
IP: 9E2F CDE8
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03-28-05, 06:33 PM | #36 | |||||||
..Rv Sucks..
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IP: CE10 8C0C
.............................................uppin
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03-30-05, 09:58 AM | #37 | |||||||
..Rv Sucks..
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IP: C34C 4F12
uppin............................................. .
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03-31-05, 09:59 AM | #38 | |||||||
..Rv Sucks..
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IP: C34C 4F12
up................................................
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04-01-05, 10:08 AM | #39 | |||||||
..Rv Sucks..
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IP: C34C 4F12
uppin.............................................
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04-06-05, 10:25 AM | #40 | |||||||
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IP: C34C 4F12
uppin and close this shit already.................
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04-06-05, 02:39 PM | #41 | ||||
GG Haterz
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IP: 5D87 50F9
Voted For: FlOw InTeLLiGeNt
Not a great battle. Untraceable: You rely on vocab WAY too much. It does not fit your verse, and also throws your flow off completely. I don't feel any frustration in your verse either. Your flow fell off completely in one bar, and that hurt you. Your complexity wasn't as detailed as Era's either. Overall, your verse is ok, but I think you need to not worry bout vocab and work on your details. Era Zistibul: This verse's emotion isn't that strong, but I can see and halfway feel the frustration of the kid. Your vocab was a good blend, and it didn't throw off your flow. Your flow was pretty good. Not much of a twist on the topic but I like the Frustrated, Frustrated.... part. That pretty much won it for you. That just sets the tone. Work on your imagery and workin in some multis. Overall, both of you need to work on your imagery. UT, put more time into the verse and Era put more time in imagery. v/ Era Zistibul
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04-12-05, 01:56 PM | #42 | |||||
in your system
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IP: 9E2F CDE8
Voted For: FlOw InTeLLiGeNt
meh, this was a decent battle untraceable....i thought you had a cool verse, you had good imagery at the end, but the start wasn't too good, and the emotion coulda been better, i think thats why flow got my vote, he had better imagery and emotion...but you did write a solid verse, came good with multies and structure was good too, flowed nicely, but i think flow took it flow, nice verse, interesting, good imagery and emotion, and you kept it consistent, which really separated you two, good use of multies and rhyming, and overall a solid verse, keep up v/flow
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