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Voted For: final


Final:

Your piece was pretty good.. It started off solid.. and the first 2 bars were your best bars of the battle.. and thats what you need.. make the opening lines good and you got the reader hooked.. wordplay was good.. structure could have been better as could vocab.. decent emotion but i didnt see much depth in it until the last couple bars.. you didnt really go deeper into the subject.. you more or less described what energy was.. which wasnt a bad way to go either...

overall : 8.7/10

Premanition:

dope piece also.. you had better vocab, but the emotion wasnt there for the whole first half of the verse.. and in a topical emotion makes the piece better.. no wordplay but u didnt really need it because your vocab made up for that.. you came more deep than final.. but the 2 biggest things i had with your verse was... the opening didnt grasp my attention, after the first couple bars i didnt even want to read it anymore.. but it got a lil better as u went foward... 2nd thing was the switch in your verse..you went from a discription piece to a vivid piece out of nowhere.. you didnt give any sign that the consistency of the desciption part of the verse was going to change.. so i kinda didnt understand when the kid woke up.. i was thinking where did that come from.. but i read again and understood it a bit better

overall :7.2/10

vote: final


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aight thanks ill return the favor no doubt...

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Voted For: Premanition

Final:
yo man that was a good verse your emotion war there and your crwtivty was there but i wasent really feeling where the imagery was going to?...but the vocab n stucture was good the stucutre was alright not the best but it was good n you flowed well but it was just that imagery that wasent there to give you this win..and a bit of the stucture i feel you can do better and also you were on topic good..no hate

Prem:
alright i liked your creativty and emotion and your imigery was very well done and also you had some alright vocab but kinda fell iunno but it was alright not the best vocab but what i liked was your stucutre and flow mostly. but i really feel your creativty and imigery got you this win..no hate

VOTE/Prem
if some way my vote is not properly rigth then f u people cuz i vote explained well to many hoes say i didnt explain it right...so strobe dotn bother

aight thanks

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