Originally Posted by ~{ExClusive}~

hows this tell me feedback on this:

Ill battle anyone over you cuz you wack, is what I meant…
Just from this punchline you lost and I got more then 100 percent/

Originally Posted by ~philosopher~

ok I just fixed it the best I could, original verse in the sig link, this one I fixed, L.I., can you fix it more??? show me what I coulda done better

I feel bad merkin you after L.I. just fucked yo ass up/
Way you get beat, it's like you 'wear to much makeup'/
Didnt see this merkin comin, like I murdered you in stealth/
I dont like insultin you but 'For$aken' you do it to yourself/
You can ask you crew for 'salvation', but there laughing to/
And I'd say pray to 'god', but he has already 'Forsaken' you/
Tryin to battle an mc like myself, why'd you even bother/
Battle is lookin like starwars 'For$aken I am your father'/
My rhymes like hot sauce, leave you scared and 'shakin'/
Yo physcick, saw ahead a time an named yoself For$aken/

Originally Posted by BigChase

wrod....want me to hlep these cats elevate???

Originally Posted by Mike Hawk

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Originally Posted by L.I.

I feel bad merkin you after L.I. just fucked yo ass up/
Way you get beat, it's like you 'wear to much makeup'/
Nah..links are worn out now a days...dont use em...dont use 'these' things around ur punches...the meta is weak...
^^She gettin clowned, whored, cuz they wear make up^^

Didnt see this merkin comin, like I murdered you in stealth/
I dont like insultin you but 'For$aken' you do it to yourself/
Meh...its just not a punch, ur just stating,
^^It's cuz he named himself forsaken, basically insultin himself,^^

You can ask you crew for 'salvation', but there laughing to/
And I'd say pray to 'god', but he has already 'Forsaken' you/
Decent...made me smile...this was the best bar so far...sorta witty...good bar...

Tryin to battle an mc like myself, why'd you even bother/
Battle is lookin like starwars 'For$aken I am your father'/
Noooooo...never again...horrible...if u think about it...it doesnt even classify as a punch...
^^Luke i'm your father, cuz he gettin sonned is what it really means,^^

My rhymes like hot sauce, leave you scared and 'shakin'/
Yo physcick, saw ahead a time an named yoself For$aken/
Nah...just not working...already tried so many personals with his name...

You really forcused on his name alot...which isnt good...go at him from all aspects...onlky had one good bar in there...but thats sumtin to work off....keep elevating