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this 3 part epic is coming along very nicely....basically all i have to say is part 2 out did part one and if it keeps up part 3 should be off the hook....although part 2 is definitely one of at least your top 3 open mics written, the imagery and wordplay was outta control...hit me up if you want to collab sometime
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"To the Capital where kids evaporated on the National Mall, the intense heat printing their shadows on the back of the walls! The shadows … they seemed to almost breathe, cackle and call Shadows of past acts and blissfully ignorant works of camouflage! The Shadows!!" I thought this was the dopest part of all three until... "Sliding shadowed visions of imprisoment, shades of confinement The Capitol cast shadows of mass class assasination assignments" then...verse 2 line 2 kind'of got throw'd a bit..until I remembered this is a dope story. Overall...props!! This second was the dopest (in my humble opinion) The whole thing should be audio though for emphasis!! One
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I liked this one better than the first part. I see you have a story that seems to mix 28 Days Later with Bush behind a red button. Interesting.
The flow was dope and the story line was grasping. I'm enjoying this epic of yours....I'll read part III soon. I, too am writing a two parter, but am less consistent with the writing. The opener was hooking.... "What man renames himself God and claims the axe of Thor, and buries it in his thorax and poverty-scorched hapless shores? Crimson lightning flashed, as acid splashed in smolderin’ rains I carried my dying brother on my back, to ‘shoulder the pain’ The air was suffocated with snow, as white sheets split the sky. Warm flakes of ash, without a storm break, whizzed on by. "… Hell always looks prettier in Christmas time," " Loving it. |
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Give This Mcee A Medal, Fuck A Few More Months In Rb This Deserves To Go In Legends Without A Doubt!!! Penskillz For Prezzz! Lol !!!
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