Voted For: TiLT

Its cold in the earth but you'll receive-this-shit-hot
You athiest? i'll still send you to hell believe-it-or-not
^^flow nicely...but was not a good punch 7/10
Barz is prune juiced, you got no hard-shit
I'll bury U w/ your picture now u're an underground artist
^^really feelin this line 9/10
Dogg, your way Out-Of-Range, its Strange to see No-Reel-Change
Brawla u cant beat me wit "Punches-More-Played" than Monopoly-Games
^^played out
This kid aint no brawla, Like Alfalfa hes a Lova not a Fighta
Open ya eyes a lil Wida to see Im more letha than a Spida
^^I dun get this one,seemed to glorify
leave u blood like color of text, Grapple Ya "Wind-Pipe" to Hold-Yer-Breath
Like a "Dead-Man-Walkin-In-His-Game" Imma Leave This Kids Key-Bored-To-Death
^^Nice

Conclusion-This was a nice verse.Ur best line was the one bout underground.Ur worst was that monopoly one.
Some more personals would be nice.

Kid you make your lips numb by spitting them stink rhymes
He could put gold paint on his tongue, but still his profits won't shine
^^hot,feelin this line
I can guess what's your next audio track is going to be "kneel to the cheif"
Your punches are like your balls, without legs they still won't touch thee (ground)
^^wtf/didn't rhyme,punchline was good but it didn't rhyme.
This kid think he's an bully, he went to beauty school "to tease hair"
Kid use gay pick up lines instead of punches like "can i push in your stool lair?"
^^whack
Tilt plays with "pooh" all day, no wonder his punches stink like hell
When this bitch came out, his mom put him next piece of crap "twins" she yelled
^^decent
Kid your punches are amuse like an cigarettes mix with hot water "soggy butts"
He though being a volcano, was to eat so many beans and like the crap erupt
^^decent

Conclusion-Well the biggest problem was that u had a line that didn't rhyme.U got some good punchline concepts there...but the way u put it toghether didn't work.

Vote-Tilt(return tha favor or i'm dq this vote)

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=193881
^^return tha favor