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Tony Green 1 16.67%
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Old 09-02-05, 06:49 PM   #1
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Tony Green-Nice drop here.Followed topic nicely.Liked the twist in the storyline at end of the verse too.Flow was off at points(mainly the end)... due to some lines not rhyming.Like this one
"I made 6 figures the concert's still going on....
The only connection to my stickly mother is my cell phone"
^^didn't rhyme.
But at the beggining..there were some internals n shit that flowed nicely.Not a very complex verse here...but still good.Keep it up.

One step beyond-Well...you had a more complex verse with metaphors and such.More direct with the topic and shit.But...i didn't enjoy it as much as I did to Tony Green's one.Flow was your biggest problem.Too many lines didn't rhyme at all.Had a good vocab...so that's good.But it didn't really impact ur verse.

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rtf the favor below(it's topical) in 3 days...or this vote will be removed
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=206909



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Old 09-02-05, 01:46 AM   #2
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checkin the polls on this...don't wanna get a D/R comment since OSB is my home-dizzle lol...Wordnessification.
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Old 09-02-05, 02:44 PM   #3
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uppin thanxx deranged I will rtf....................
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Old 09-02-05, 07:16 PM   #4
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Fucking stupid....................................
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Old 09-02-05, 07:32 PM   #5
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Fucking stupid....................................



LMAo.....first off......That was just my opinion...and second.....if you had a problem with it......direct it through PM.....

And LMAO@that herb comment from that other cat...
 
Old 09-02-05, 07:41 PM   #6
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LMAo.....first off......That was just my opinion...and second.....if you had a problem with it......direct it through PM.....

And LMAO@that herb comment from that other cat...


yep, and 'fucking stupid' was his opinion......its not like he gave you any reason or leeway to post back in here....

dont contradict son.
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Old 09-02-05, 07:36 PM   #7
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v/OSB

because i thought he expressed the topic alot more creatively, vividly, imaginatively. i could really get more of a deep, lustful feeling in his; i was pretty much clinging to his verse, wanting to read more.....and thats a good gift to have when writing

tony, not that yours wasn't bad, you write with a basic style, and you express only from a single angle....you don't explore your thoughts as much, and provoke any more thought or feelings than you have to......and for me, i really look for topicals to enchant my mind, your story was touching.....but simple, it was nice......but i thought OSB took it, for complexity, creativity, originality, and overall enjoyment

v/OSB, props to both, keep up.
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Old 09-02-05, 07:39 PM   #8
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and if you still think im in TE, im not, im friends with Soul Rebel and pretty much everyone in TE........im in The Council, and if you have a problem with honesty and the way i judge topicals, by all means, get it removed....but this was an honest, explained vote, so don't be crying
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Old 09-02-05, 08:05 PM   #9
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Drakel strikes again. Burn. That's at Deranged not OSB btw.
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Old 09-02-05, 08:12 PM   #10
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nice try out in TE scouting.....i fucking laughed at that temple one man
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Old 09-02-05, 08:14 PM   #11
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Yeah I needed to shake off the rust nah mizzle? lol uppin for OSB if this bitch
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Old 09-02-05, 08:32 PM   #12
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yeah, OSB is lazy............upping for him cause where is he?
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Old 09-02-05, 08:34 PM   #13
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God I fucking love OSB so much.

But seriously, he did drop good. All real topical cats here see that.
 
Old 09-03-05, 12:48 AM   #14
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Old 09-03-05, 03:14 AM   #15
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Thanxx Kesse and I want get it removed.................
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