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Old 09-20-05, 04:03 AM   #1
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Man, I dont mean to offend you or anything, but your writing style is real flawed. Plot is generic, not much creativity in naming... Well there is, but the names arent very good. The way you use your words just doesnt sound very professional. I've had to mark 15 year old kid's narratives, and some were better than this.

I dont really know though cos I just read that first chapter.



see, i just got finished reading the first chapter, and while there were some spotty lines, I liked the names, and story enough to want to read more of the book... it kind of reminded me of ender's game, only in a completely different setting.
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Old 09-20-05, 04:23 AM   #2
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see, i just got finished reading the first chapter, and while there were some spotty lines, I liked the names, and story enough to want to read more of the book... it kind of reminded me of ender's game, only in a completely different setting.


Yeah maybe I was a bit harsh... But those spotty lines shouldnt even be there.

The writer of the best selling book ever got her shit rejected by a fair few publishers before one accepted it. That was harry potter that got rejected. So this publisher musnt be very good.

Im not necessarily saying the shit is bad, it just needs to be revised.
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Old 09-20-05, 06:52 AM   #3
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see, i just got finished reading the first chapter, and while there were some spotty lines, I liked the names, and story enough to want to read more of the book... it kind of reminded me of ender's game, only in a completely different setting.

enders game was dope!
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Old 09-20-05, 03:57 AM   #4
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dumb shit, LOL i was being sarcastic about chingy, and i can write ten times better than him, and i owuld use creativity, like since i write rhymes i wouild add rhymes in all my stories, the whole story wouldnt rhyme but some lines owuld, it would keep the reader from being bored and it will be my gimmick,

WORD^^thats a dope idea
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Old 09-22-05, 06:45 PM   #5
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dumb shit, LOL i was being sarcastic about chingy, and i can write ten times better than him, and i owuld use creativity, like since i write rhymes i wouild add rhymes in all my stories, the whole story wouldnt rhyme but some lines owuld, it would keep the reader from being bored and it will be my gimmick,

WORD^^thats a dope idea


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Old 09-20-05, 03:58 AM   #6
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Ayo OMB wanna make a beat for me? Just straight beatbox. Nothing in particular just something that i can flow to. I'm serious too.
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Old 09-20-05, 04:00 AM   #7
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Ayo OMB wanna make a beat for me? Just straight beatbox. Nothing in particular just something that i can flow to. I'm serious too.


lol. you're the second person today...

but sure. Hit me up on msn or aim and let me know what kind of beat you want and shit.

my sn and email should be around somewhere
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Old 09-20-05, 04:07 AM   #8
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im fucking bored..im fucking bord.im about to go to sleep

so im gfonna keep posting that ^^^
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Old 09-20-05, 06:02 AM   #9
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I could say something that would be really mean and degrading..

But meh... I'll be nice for once..
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Old 09-20-05, 07:27 AM   #10
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Old 09-20-05, 05:30 PM   #11
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lmfaooo, ok, the internet, a real publisher, lmfaoooo. stfu.

I meant a REAL publisher, dumb fuck.
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Old 09-20-05, 06:32 PM   #12
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lmfaooo, ok, the internet, a real publisher, lmfaoooo. stfu.

I meant a REAL publisher, dumb fuck.


I officially label you the dumbest man alive.

It IS a real publisher...a division of RANDOM HOUSE. THE BIGGEST BOOK PUBLISHER IN THE WORLD.

Fuck sakes...people are retarted.
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Old 09-21-05, 12:15 AM   #13
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I officially label you the dumbest man alive.

It IS a real publisher...a division of RANDOM HOUSE. THE BIGGEST BOOK PUBLISHER IN THE WORLD.

Fuck sakes...people are retarted.


But your book still sucked. And you'll make like, 500$ if your lucky, congrats.
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But your book still sucked. And you'll make like, 500$ if your lucky, congrats.



$500 more than you made off it.
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I'm getting a site for me and LE, a domain .com name. We gonna publish some poetry books, word...and I write hellabetta then him!
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