both whack as fuck. lol

derek. did u even write that to a beat? if not how do u know it will go to a beat.

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It doesn't matter if he wrote it to the beat he'll have to jam it in there anyway.

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Omg your interpretation of my lines makes me think they are something they aren't!

You're GENIUS.

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i can find beats for all my shit lol... u didnt like it??

ur just combinding words that rhyme. they rnt even good. just quick. youre terrible. if u dont like it LEAVE. its not like anyone here is on ur side. ur just diggin ur self in a hole and burying ur self in horse shit.

your raps are boring damn and they played as fuck
woulda though i was a chef they way i souffled them up

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ricky whos gonna do the second verse? do u wanna? and ill clean it up with the 3rd verse? or do u want me to do the hooks too and u write the next 2 verses

u should be lucky im gunna throw in a verse.

u do first and third i do 2nd and hooks. but im not writing shit till u give me a fucking topic and beat.

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im just combining words that rhyme?

God lmfao

okay okay man I agree

I only combine words that rhyme


which means I'm about twice as good as you currently.

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the topic is being TOP OF THE CHARTS. and i think we should use lose yourself by eminem or gang injunctions by WC as the beat or just put them together in 2 seperates songs with gang injunctions as one beat and the other song with lose yourself as the beat. then see which one sounds better

Yo' get this piece of shit dnota off this site, why'd you even bring this noob here, he can't rhyme for shit, he thinks big words make him look important

Hes every played punch, pun and sterotype summ'd up in one bum.. Seriously though, your verse was trash, Who in the fuck still rhymse about a "Rap attack" rofl, kid your a herb, you said your 10x better now than you ever were and you still suck, i can only imagine how bad you were

wait im still confused....are you starting a text group....you said youd drop a verse all i see are some lyrics which terumoto very noteably pointed out was sub par.....please please tell me you are actually making music n didnt waste all this time stickin up for a "rap group" of texting....

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hahahahaa, i love this..

well im not teaching him ne thing..im just giving him a chance to jump on a few tracks.

he's writing his own shit.

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ok bud. i appreciate u takin time to read it and judge it. but jeez i just turned 18.. ive only been listening to rap since i was 12 and the majority has been pac big nas and bone thugs. and they do rhyme... have u listened to the way immortal technique writes, or r.a. the rugged man, or nas, or keith murray, jedi mind tricks, kanye, common, or lupe??? they kinda have the same style but their writing is like 203203840293092382x better and theyve been doin it much longer than me. all i need is practice. shit dude. but w.e i dont care ima stick by the way i want. im stickin to the way i like it. listen to the song ALL IM HEARING by krayzie bone. hes saying that eveyrone is tryna be like some one else and doesnt come with their own stlye. im coin with my own style so im just doin wat i want and wat i like

Yeah, it's called slant rhyming... But mineral/potential is still a bad rhyme. The flow in the last few bars was basically non-existent. A few rhymes here and there doesn't mean it flows.

It's good that you think that way, but personally I don't think you can pull off having a unique style at the level you're at. You need to learn the rules, then you can break them skillfully.

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