Voted For: Razzle Dazzle

I have to give this one to him I think he had better strucutre harder hits more multis vocab personals and opener-closer was better also here is how I graded it.
this gay's gonna see. want violence? get ya kids away from the screen
razz holdin swords in both hands, bout to put a blade through ya spleen

attacks are drastic so pack ya casket, leave ya wit arms, legs n' an ass of plastic
this rancid bastard bout to get blasted wit acid, till they take ya assets home in baskets
get bashed with classics when we clash fists, ya gettin beat with chainsaws
fuck the set up, i'll cut ya head up, fork ya mind n' eat ya brains raw
mangle and cut, i'll tangle ya guts into angles n' such
hangin ya ankles and nuts, forcin other men to have u spanked in the butt
ya get strangled too much, warn the feds, ain't know who i'm harmin next
slice ya limbs nice and thin, to extend my collection of arms n' legs
15/18

razzle its like this,

wit flames your flesh is obliterated from pain-inbeded...
ive been self trained-to-shred-it, so your blood from your vain-is-shedded...
its drained i take-tha-credit, i start your body shakin...
niddles stimulate like "intercoarse" N infect ya body till ya Bold like cancer patients.... *ha*
razzle i'll squeez ya lungs, N ram a vacum-hoes in ya befor we see How-Much-U-SUCK...
get ready 4 a quick lace'in, cuz "Truthfully" i'll stab at ya bladder 2 help Spill-Ya-Gut's...
razzle head like a Deck-Chair i'll fold-ya-dome, ya style "old filth" coverd in mold-N-foam..
i'll Chop off ya Balls N hand them to u, So u can Hold-Ya-Own.. *ouch*
12/18

hit up on my link peace.

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