Voted For: Frank~Castle

You wanted ta battle,For you Today's hopeless!
Im like Visine with tha spit,You need me ta STAY FOCUS!
^^No punch in here....0/10
Im attrocious tah roaches,sprayin whom ever is closes.
While you just smoke an mirrors,Just a bunch ah Hocus Pocus!
^^flowed bad...bad punch....2/10
Your skills are bogus,they dont appear like Its me verses ah Ghost.
An the only time you where above Number 1 is when you made your first post!
^^OK........6/10
I know it hurts close...cuz my lines kill like stress can!!
Hey!,you might be married ta the game but Im always the best~MAN!
^^coulda been worded better....4/10
Let me Load up the clip like ah movie an show you the best part!
An this battle is short,cuz your lines are so long they got stretch marks!
^^Played.....4/10

OK....flow was off at points and structure was OK.Punches lacked.1st bar was not a punch.It was you talking about yourself.2nd bar was weak.3rd bar was your best bar.What you really need to do is stop talking about yourself so much and drop punches.

Cat I’m like a “boiled egg” in the morning –“hard to beat”
You like a “marathon runner” with bad shoes need to deal with” de- feet” (Defeat)
^^de feet/defeat lines are played as fuck...1/10
Cat your lines “dull” they need “sharpness”
So stop writing with a broken “pencil” is “pointless”
^^Whack.....2/10
My lines are like an “elephant's thought” they carry a lot of “weight”
Cat you’ve lost this battle it not your fault its fate/
^^Whacker....0/10
So cat don’t run you mouth like u great/
I know u aint nothing but a fool/
^^Not a punch...0/10
Cause like x-ray technician I see right through you
^^gonna finish that bar?

Ok...your structure was horrible.Flow was meh.Punches were far too basic.That da feet/defeat line has been played out in 2002.Aside from that bar...there was nothing.No punches.You didn't even finish that bar in the last line.Work on everything

Vote-FrankCastle
RTF BELOW PLEASE
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=203256