well its kinda hard to break down a freestyle man....cause you cant really say nothing about lyrics...caust it IS a free....

but i will say.....work on pronunciation...it may be the mic...i dunno...but it seems like some words you slur around...and it sounds like your talking with spit in your mouth...but it honestly could be the mic...i really cant tell....

but yea...theres not a whole lot you can break down with a freestyle....cause a free is tons different than the elements of song making...

but come back with a full song..and ill be happy to break it down

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You sound like Will Smith in the intro,

I hope you got pussy for making that pimp

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Sure didn't, but shes still the homie.

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Soundclick

Damn, I thought after listening to that she'd be all like, ho-me

[/wackasswordplay]

If we don't tap the booty, it aint no big deal
There's more fish in the see, and we keep it reel

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You keep it about as real as pamela anderson's tits.

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no prob.

keep em coming....

i hope people are taking what im saying and putting it to good use

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YO ike.

Peep this and let me know what you think. I only just uploaded it, but its been on my comp for a while.

www.soundclick.com/onemb

^status diss.

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Did you not notice the REEL wordplay, or did you notice it but decided to make fun of me anyways, you inconsiderate son of a bitch,

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oh shit.. my bad.

You keep it about as "reel" as a fishing boat that uses nets instead of fishing rods to catch fish.

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lmfaooooooooooooooooooo

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thanks Ike....I'll think bout that when I next record.

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Ike, dawg you might aswell do the top one!!!

www.soundclick.com/madknight

thanx Ike

ok Quality is ass...but u know that...considering u want new equipment...

first...off when your talking at the beginning...it sounds like your computerized..like you take too many breaks inbetween words...just talk smoothly like you would if u was having a conversation with someone....your talking is just soo robot like at the start...it makes people biased towards the track...

ok in your verse...when you over dub your verse...make sure it lines up right with your verse....i can hear it well cause im listening through headphones...the background voices are off..and arent very smooth...if u dont get em right the first time...keep going till everything lines up right...over dubs can help a verse tremendously.......

with your flow...your too hesitant...you honestly have gotten tons better with every song you do...your presense has gotten a lot better....your coming with more energy....but the flow....too choppy...just come smooth with it....lay it out on the page...where u dont have to take all those breaks...and u dont have to stop to let the beat catch up..

as far as the singing man...not good...the melody COULD go with the beat...and i see where u were trying to go with it....but it just didnt turn out good...the stacks on it were off...and it just wasnt on beat well....and it was too off and on...it just didnt fit in well.....if it was done properly..it could have been nice...but....just work on keeping on tune and on beat if u wanna sing a hook...and on the hook..you DEFINITELY cannot have your stacks off...

like i said...keep making songs...thats the best way to elevate....just keep going and going...and youll get better with every move u make......take that and run with it

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Thanx Loads Ike very helpful!