I aint saying your shiit was horrible. it just.. i didn't like it that much..
but no doubt you are the best om writer in the site...

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Guess who?...

...Paramik Fuckin'...

...Owns You!

Did you not understand it? I'm confused... Oh well... not everyone likes everything everyone does and in this case I guess this just wasn't the type of OM that you like or maybe you had too high expectations or what not... I'm not goin' to hold an opinion against you and I hope you read some of my OM that come after this.

If fact Imma quote you yo!

Thanks to bonecollector & ~Genius~ for leaving feed.

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uppin' for feedback.

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A pretty good peice. I'ma break it down like this.

Lyrically-wise, this is one of your best pieces. The imagery is on point and the descriptive words you chose really helped to paint this picture. When I was reading this I kinda felt like you took your time writing it, cause it came across thought out, and deep. So how much time did you spend on it?

Now, as you may know, when I listen to a track I'm listening for one thing, that's lyrical content. I hate these rappers like 50 cent that only talk about money and bitches and getting shot. I mean it's reality so I like hearing a bit about it, but I enjoy seeing the discriptive ways someone can convey that message across. To me that's what you did here. You took some of the harsh reality's that some people face and delieverd it in such a way that is art.

What I didn't like.....

Basically, this is just constructive criticism, and because its so easy for someone to drop some feed and just say "yea your king shit way to go."
Nothing major though but there were a few lines that I wasn't feeling as much,

...too long since you all kids felt the drummin'

It makes my lost lamb of a soul more wicked...
...my principal's punchin' my one way hell borne ticket...

A few others but all-in-all, this peice should be up for drop of the month.

~Vinch

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Thanks Vinch... I appreciate it... upppin'... will rtf

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Thanks man... uppin' for more feed.

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can you RTF, i left some good feed

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I thought I did Kesse...

I'll get to it next time I have some time though...

Uppin'.

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