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08-26-04, 11:24 PM | #61 | |||||||
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well im on a tight sched for the night, i'll drop you a poem i wrote yesterday thats in rap structure, tell me what you think, if you want i guess i can spit some lines later
just another grave along this cemetary path, a girl to be exact a path that leads to my heart, constantly getting stabbed in the back confused again, offering all my trust, for not love but lust watching my sympathetic dreams, and hope get blow up in dust another part of my life...wasted...just memories to rot till decay something to regret, that i'll want to forget every single day i despise the tears that flow from my eyes, regreting all my wasted tries looking up to the clouds in the sky, preparing myself for yet another lie theres just nothing left for me to grasp, just something i can't put in the past so i enter the tub, but not for a bath, i hit the tap, and take my last gasp ...i loved you.... word, peace |
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08-27-04, 04:32 AM | #62 | ||||||
...tha princess of rv...
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i quite liked that.....
the direction it was taking was nice some good emotion ok flow sum multies in there structure was off tho simple vocab... from that id say u got potential on the topical/poetry side u need more complexity..up ya vocab n metas... if u do txt battles,holla wit sum links or spit... wot u think dml?........theres potential i think.... maybe holla back wit sumthin harder?
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08-27-04, 06:21 AM | #63 | |||
Straight Hustla.
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... holla ... .
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08-27-04, 06:33 AM | #64 | ||||||
...tha princess of rv...
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IP: 3354 DAC6
erm.u in this crew menta???????????????????????...
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08-27-04, 12:30 PM | #65 | |||||||
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heres a pretty old battle between me and headgames, i've obviously elevated since then
http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=141918 |
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08-27-04, 12:40 PM | #66 | |||||||
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IP: A0C8 44A9
ahhh fuck it, i'll spit a verse gimme ten mins
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08-27-04, 12:52 PM | #67 | |||||||
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if you want "KATASTROPHE", then what you want is me
i cut emcees at the knees and leave em there to bleed i go by red bull, my style is contridicting dull i spit with metaphors, personals and multiples "KONCEPTS" is the crew that i wanna represent so pick me for this, its something you won't regret |
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08-27-04, 12:56 PM | #68 | ||||||
...tha princess of rv...
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awh no man^^^^^^^^
ur link was cool.that wasnt.......... i liked ur metas in ur battle.....i think u got potential... ima say .yes........... but wait see what dml sez.aiight
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08-27-04, 12:57 PM | #69 | |||||||
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word, i just spit that in 10 mins, cause you said throw sump down
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08-27-04, 01:01 PM | #70 | |||||
♡»..::[[.вlιиgαα.]]::..«♡
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Multies - Were 'Alright' .. Nothing Great' ..!!! Kinda Doll...! Like You (Contridicting Yourself) Vocabulary - Equal' .... Could Work On It Personals - Was Aight Wordplay - Seems To Me.. You Tried To Much In This Category!' .. Structure - Was Safe...!!! Wasn't Really Feelin Your Verse..!! Buh' ..!!!!! (Im Not Going to Cast My Vote Whether It Be Your In.. Or Your Out) Call's On You...!!!!! Multi!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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08-27-04, 01:15 PM | #71 | |||||||
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IP: A0C8 44A9
word
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08-27-04, 02:55 PM | #72 | ||||||
...tha princess of rv...
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IP: 3354 DAC6
hmmmm, like i said the verse u dropped wasnt good.but ur link was aiight..........
u got potential,but still work ro be done to improve..... i know u active which is a bonus,n u cool unlike sum herbs on dis site..... so ima say.......... MANIPULATION DANGEROUSMYNDLUNATIC FLUIDMOON ILL-GRAMMATIX MENTAL MURDEEROUS RED BULL U ON THA ROSTER....... use ur potential tho dawg............. uppin 4 tryouts........
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08-27-04, 06:01 PM | #73 | |||||||
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solid
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08-28-04, 04:33 AM | #74 | ||||
Back In Business
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let's get this shyt crackin' y'all... wuddup RB... welcome to da fam
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08-28-04, 09:14 AM | #75 | ||||||
...tha princess of rv...
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IP: 3354 DAC6
^^^^^^^^^^^^yup gon b crakin real soon.............
2 spots left.uppin 4 those tryouts.
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