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Voted For: Kein Witz

ok, heres the deal

i liked kein's approach better....he was more creative and expressed his thoughts/feelings with more perspective and detail....i was really attatched to his storyline; kept me interested the whole way through, which is what you need to be able to accomplish....overall, nice verse....could be better with emotion though, but that wasn't the focal point....well done

pen and pape...took the basic approach here, sometimes thats okay, if you get involved/detailed into the topic, but you didn't, so much anyways....weren't that consistent, i thought, which took away alot from the piece....you had that lilttle thinking quote after each verse, which was pretty cool....but i thought some verses really lacked in imagery and emotion.....although a couple were really intuative; you just need to keep a consistency through your piece.....keep up, you had a nice piece

overall, both came good, but kein came more creative and more aspects stood out...i.e. imagery and such....well done to both, keep up to both

v/kein witz

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uppin this cmon votes plz stopsleepin

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uppin this like always dammit.......lol when is this gonna get closed?????........lol

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Voted For: Kein Witz

Pen N Paper - i dunno from ya genereal demeanour on RV i expected more from you lol, your verse lacked structure and this took away from ots flow, which made your idas hard to follow, i think you took the simplist approach to the topic and u did cover it well tho, vocab was decent - 7/10

Kein - didnt know u waz dope like dis wid topicals cuz, the vocabulary was on a level just below mine which is still dope, and u used it effectively, ur drop hada nice story to it, structure was itght and oncise n shizzle flowed well, ur approach was not as simplistic as pen n paper, you went into detail and left a very enjoyable topical - 8.5/10

Vote- Kein Witz

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