Ive decided to bump Champion off the mixtape, this is the next possible first single and video op, would like good feedback on here..and no im not going mainstream I cater to all my audiences, I still held the lyrics gangsta tho, that never change yall..

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"Sweat That Body"

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http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3103820
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=236874

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ight so if this is possb. gon be on a video ill help ya out......

eq some more lows in the hook, your voice is a lil high on the beat sounds a tad whiney i know its not your fault but some more lows would help...

verses take your acca's and make a copy of them n work with some compression see if it helps cuz your low points fall off....not flow wise but volume wise......

3rd verse....emphacise the ride dirty line more with adlibs will have people go "oh"

all in all you know this is a tight track, im just helpin you out with some very minor stuff that if you tryin to push this track a lil further....for rv purposes you know its a 10/10....the set back i see hurting this track the most is the beat is kinda lulling....so maybe find some spots for some more "yeah yeah's" and adlibs....that could just be cuz im tired too......hope this helps brah

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Thanks man..MOS DEF that helps, basically this is how Ima do this mixtape shit..when they're all done..Ima add adlibs if I need to n etc and compress it more regarding the feed I get so Ima save what you said nah mean jay, and then just edit it at the end of the tape i def apreciate it and I feel youuu bruh..thanks for the feed

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overall this track was just aight for me reason being is im not a big club fan but ya swagg is def there ya flow is fiorever improving hook is doin it with a lil more bass in there would be cooll but overall real solid track ...holla atvcha boy pRAH DIGGA

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Thanks dawg yeah I know not everyone will feel it cos ebveryone got diff tastes, so I hit em all up, so my club fans can feel this and u know my other joints for other audiences nah mean..but thanks dawggy

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Aight.....feelin tha beat..hook sounds crazy feelin that...catchy too...I ain't really a club joint kinda guy but this one is dope to listen too..verse is nice delivery is righ...nice pumped vibe on tha joint...rest of evrse is nice....hook again nice ish...verse again...now this verse is dope but like default said you should make that cha line 'ridin dirty' stand out more and add some adlibs too it for effect. Otherwise rest of tha track is hottt feelin it.

10/10.....really nice club joint.

But you just need to do a lil tweakin n this will be tha perfect club joint.

Nice drop.

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u sound a lil whiny on the chorus....

i love ur delivery on this......ur flow....nice....got loads of emotion...its like ur basically talkin on the track....

but it looks like u had fun on this track

to me the chorus is ur downfall..... just a lil off....im not a club guy myself...but the uptempo beat and the way u spit to this formualted well.....was an enjoyable track honestly

Thanks fam, and yeah the chorus actually was recorded at a different location, nah mean, so what im gonna do is prolly re record that or add bass and lows to it

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okay, the beat's hot for a club joint. i like the hook. i won't speak on the mixin lol you already know what's up with that.

first verse is tight, you know nothin off the walls but then again - it's a club track. second verse got some nice switch-ups and noticible lines in there. in the third verse there's a part wher eyou spit sticcatto and i can't make out what you're sayin clearly, like it's just beneath that discernibility threshold.

hook comes out again, i thought the hook at the end of th ethird verse shoulda rode out twice then played some pure instrumental with you talkin on the way out woulda faded out real dope. but you know, that's all in the editing magic

hot song, and we already know what's needed to make it hotter!

onehunnit!!

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^^yessur thanks fam..and yup ima re record this with the new shit ...and get it all cleared upppp...yessssssssssssssssssssur

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beat is cool for this kinda song. reminds me of some r.kelly fiesta kinda track. hook is kinda boring for me. just think it could be a little more energetic.

verse 1 is okay. flow was cool. lyrics really dont matter with this kinda song but they were okay at best.
verse 2 likin the flow and switch ups on this right here. some actually cool lines on this one so it makes it a lil better
verse 3 comes in. i like how you came in with this verse. i couldnt really make out what you sayin on some parts on this verse.


for the most part this was a cool track. the only problem i really had was that with that slur you rap with it makes it hard to make out what you say...

This is a nice piece pimpin....maybe a little more hype in your vocals and chorus....sounds TUFF when you sped the verses up....I like the serena and venus butt put together line....HAHA....good shit

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ha thanks, yah it gon get re recordeeed

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