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Old 02-12-04, 10:50 PM   #1
The Necromancer
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Me Be Different

If I'm part of the human race, I won't run in this race
This campaign of pain won't pass wind past my face
I won't ever even place because I won't ever make it
I'll dissapate in this place before I ever take it
Before I take a place I'll clean it off, I've seen enough
I'm not tough enough to keep my place in good taste
But what is really good taste if I can't taste my tongue
If you could taste my tongue for me how's it taste?

Hold all these emotions swiftly in a brief case
A brief case of emotional damage god dammit I planned it
Not to be the way it is but I lost the race so I hand it
A new olive branch to branch off a wing of a bird
But the hospital wing was built over burial grounds of the bird
And I realize I won't ever fly again
Not that I could, I could not
So I bother not to finish a race, I never leave the starting block

I could not, ever understand the wind upon her knees
Like she was satisfying the flying aerial trainies
As we jump off the top rope do we get such pleasure?
But not me, I only get pleasure when I land
On this land that we built, free of the home, land of the brave
I realized I'm just an outdustrial commercialized slave
To advertise the lives that we've all gotta pay
But the dues I lose when I used the fuse to say

Shock me, say something halfway decently intelligemental
I've gone mental in a storm of words thrown torrential
Like storms, but I'm not a nigress goddess of weather
I'm only a man and in his hand a peice of leather
For love aint forever, and I aint for whoever
And I aint gonna be ever staying together with you
Whoever you may think you are to bring wind to her knees
To get eaten out worse than my flesh with fleas

But I'm like a flea even though they eating me
I'm still insignificant and I jump really far
Does that make them cannibals or are they going too far?
How many more thoughts can I provoke for you to see?
But not me, can never be seemed, ever be gleamed
It's too easy to learn to hate, but forget me not
So I took the thought and ripped it apart at the seam
So it means that I could never ever remember it not
Never ever remember the spot
Seven upwards and to the right or wrong directions
These lessons I learned are like bricks to the head
They hurt, But I won't ever let it show
Mostly cause I like it, also they would know
And they may teach me but I will never let them learn
If they learn of my pain once again I shall burn
I'm sick of the fire
And you won't ever tell me different

Don't make me be different.

Make me be different.

Me be different.

Things lost in translation. What about Don'tness?
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Old 02-15-04, 08:58 PM   #2
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ok...well ive been replyin to pieces all night that have 0 responses....and so far all have been really short...but this isnt and i cant for the life of me understand why its getting slept on....

the rhyme scheme u had flow'd nicely...kept the piece on top an usually rhyme comes out sounding forced an ish, but u did a great job of keep in it real

i seriously have to many lines to quote but this stood out to me the most:

But I'm like a flea even though they eating me
I'm still insignificant and I jump really far
Does that make them cannibals or are they going too far?
How many more thoughts can I provoke for you to see?

good ish...hope to read mo from u

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